America
is getting
wet.
those lawmakers,
how they love to
finger her.
they’ve taken lessons
on foreplay from
the best OB/GYNs
in town.
“fuck sex therapist!”
they say,
“they’re too caught
up in feelings, we
only care about the
end result.”
fingers, sticks,
vaginal speculums,
they all do the same trick.
the SWAT team
raided her house while
she was at work,
they replaced the
feathers in her underwear
with sandpaper
because they deemed
self-pleasure
unconstitutional.
we’re only allowed
to pursue happiness,
never obtain it.
it’s being flaunted
just beyond our
grasp.
fat men in
police uniforms
dangle our nirvana
over our heads
like the keys
to our jail cell.
“come on, reach
for it!”
they snicker
between mouthfuls
of jelly doughnuts.
but we can never
jump high
enough.
between the
static and
the screams,
you can hear
the oooh’s and
ahhh’s
becoming louder
and less apart:
“sign this
bill to make us
richer and everyone
else poorer.”
“oooh, oooh yes!”
“sign here
to ban the
first amendment.”
“oooh god, yes!”
“sign here to
make this
country a
dictatorship.”
“yes, yes, yes!”
prepare
for the
flood.
A contest entry
- Experiment by Dienush.
3550 points, ended January 31, 2008, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Experiment: 3rd set of trophies by Dienush.
1282 points, ended February 4, 2008, 3 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Comments
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Congrats on the Gold, this deserved it! And I have to say the society and the government is exactly the same in Australia, but probably on a smaller scale... You had some great lines in this, a very bold write.
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haha I was very amused by this poem. Not to dismiss it's societal message, but I loved the way you intertwined with with sex. (a side note, when I saw the phrase SWAT team, I thought it said TWAT team ahahah oops)
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my personal contest judging policy didn't let me do this but now that it's over...
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I really like this. The title is quite interesting and I find it thought provoking that you don't capitalize the a in American in the title yet you capitalize it in America. Actually I wonder if perhaps un-capitalizing the letters in those abbreviations (that you've totally lost me in like only one person could
) might have an even better effect by having only one word capitalized. Since you personify America, and let me say you personify "her" really well. This is very intriguing... There are some lines that really sound beautiful, like
"they replaced the
feathers in her underwear
with sandpaper
because they deemed
self-pleasure
unconstitutional."
or
"fat men in
police uniforms
dangle our nirvana
over our heads"
The ending is very... sexy. And the message is more than clear. It's quite the intriguing poem indeed.
As for the experiment part of my contest, you sound somewhat like Kevin, which surprises me that you would have actually entered my contest, but yeah.
p.s. you used the word "nirvana"
p.p.s Thanks a lot for your entry
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Haha, so I only somewhat sound like myself in this poem?
I'm surprised too that I entered, I was actually able to throw something up.
Thank you for your always insightful comment.
p.s. yup, I used the dreaded nirvana word, did that by any chance give me away any?.
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