As I lie in bed, my pillow tear-stained,
painful thoughts of us becoming more strained.
Memories of promises made long ago,
age lines on my face have started to grow.
Tomorrow my love, I promise we'll go
for a night on the town, take in a show.
Just like the others, that promise broken,
friends more important, me I'm a token.
You claim their all clients, that's just a lie,
I smelled her perfume, on your shirt and tie.
Living a lie, your words full of deceit,
your heart is as cold, as our bedroom sheets.
Today is the day, I've made up my mind,
you'll face the wrath of my words so maligned.
A token no longer, life starts anew,
no more of the games, my dear we are through.
Author notes
seamaiden
This isn't a personal write as I am very happily married. Nobody should stay when the relationship is filled with deceit.
A contest entry
- Broken promisses... by Wolf Mistress.
1200 points, ended February 23, 2008, 39 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wonderful
What a very well expressed write. So much is personified in your words. A very skillful and creative poem. Congrats on the honorable mention.
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penman, Thank you for the applauses and for your words so kind. It is tough to put yourself in another's shoes. I love the challenge of writing in this manner. Thank you for the congrats also. They are greatly appreciated. seamaiden
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Yep...you're right...when I read your poem I think this is a situation that happens a lot in relationships...
OMG..it must be awful to see lipstick or smell other womens perfume on your lovers clothings...
I know a woman who found other womans hair all over her husbands clothings...
I think this poem reminded me of that story from a close friend...
Good luck in my contest
XXJeannette
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Unfortunately this does happen in our society and has in the past as well. In the past so many women put up with it because of the vows they had made. These days it has changed. The saddest part is, when the vows have been taken both partners should remember that they are sacred and they are made to last forever. I'm glad you liked this and that I was able to write in character here. Thank you for the applause and your words so kind with your best wishes. They are greatly appreciated. seamaiden ♥
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Excellent take of the prompt Dear This was written very well.
I wish you the best of luck with this write in the contest Dear. Redwing Spirit
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I'm glad you enjoyed my take on this one. It is hard to write something like this when you haven't been there. I had to put myself in their shoes. Thank you for your words so kind. They are greatly appreciated. seamaiden ♥
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You have done an excellent job running with these emotions. Unforunately I have been to the place you penned and I can assure you you are quite accurate. Glad to know you didn't have to suffer this too!
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I am sorry that you had to experience this first hand. Even writing it I almost got a little more graphic. I had to hold back. lol I'm glad I could find that place in my writing and even more so that I haven't gone through it. I do hope that things are different for you now. Thank you for the applause and your words so kind. They are greatly appreciated and very touching. seamaiden ♥
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This is well done! I am so glad to read the Author's Note. I love it when a poet can pen strong emotions that are fictitious. It only proves how good a poet you are.
Love,
Amera♥
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She asked for the emotions that would be felt in broken promises. I just went with the flow. Thank you for the applause and your words so kind. They are greatly appreciated and I am touched. seamaiden ♥
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