My life began to spiral
deeper and deeper down
as I took my final walk
through this forgotten town
the desire I had to die
was driving me so mad
just as this empty life
had left me here,so sad
this sadistic world had tortured me
in every possible way
thus my lonely soul fell apart
more and more each day
I felt so lost and helpless
with no answers to my pleas
so I allowed my tears to fall
as my heart continued to bleed
without a little love
or a single friend
my heart was never given
a chance to heal or mend
so as I string this noose
around my pale, thin neck
I remember my old life
before it became this wreck
I hear my master calling me
from the depths of hell
as I stand upon this chair
prepared to break this spell
and when I am gone
my child do not cry
I hope you'll always know
you were not the reason why
as my feet approach
the edge of this chair
I silently whisper
my one final prayer.
Author notes
Me and my best friend wrote this so don't steal. Well if you read the "title" (which you hopefully did...would be kinda creepy if you didn't, seeing as how you have to click the title to get here 0.o)this poem is desperately in need of a title so if you have any suggestions, please let me know =) Thankies
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- Stolen Happyness
- Final Tears
- Lost Eyes
Loved the write it made me cry lol
those are my suggestions -
I Love this!
Title ideas:
-Whispers From The Other Side
-On The Edge
-My Last Resort -
I loveeed this poem. It was really great and flowed really nicely. As far as titles... Maybe
Final Prayer
Or
Last Prayer
Or
Last Whisper
Or
Final Voice
Or
Okay well you get the point. I have more ideas if you want them. ^.^
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Ummm... noose, neck, and die
Prayer for the lonesome
tears of the condemned
idk thats all I could think of... Great poem though
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Suicide Cocktail
You've got the moment. You have the pain. Go deeper and darker into the night. Suicide takes greater conviction. Its madness reaches in to chill a deadened heart. With some tweaking, it will become better. The last 4 lines "brought me to the edge of my chair." like to see the improved product
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That's beautiful, and heart wrenching.
as for a title, i would suggest
"One final Prayer"
or
"Explanation" (Perhaps "An explanation in desperation)
or
"Just so you know"
Those would be my suggestions.
it is a really beautiful write.
Brava
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