I look into her fallen tears
Quiet on the soft pillow
Yet each one holding our secret
Ours alone and yet shared by so many
And it stirs...
Up from winding dark paths it calls
Seeping ever slowly from rotten holes
Where it resides
Some people ignore it, pretend it isn’t there
Hiding it behind heavily built walls
And years of lies
But still it keeps, and creeps within us
Waiting for the chance to make itself known
Destroying lives
True love may banish it to the depths
Trapped within the corners of the darkest shadows
Silent it cries
Yet some welcome it, envy its power
Hoping to tap its enormous potential
Its offered prize
For it guarantees unlimited greatness
Delivering as promised but now alive within
Its victims’ eyes
Shall we be afraid of inevitable consumption?
Of sweet temptation with a wicked smile,
With tender bribes?
Stand firm, accept its evil presence without fear
For some say it may enter only if you ask it in
Such have unwise
Lost now in a twisted morph of reasoning
Never able to see or grasp precious light
Reflected in her tears
No compromise
No more to rise…is love's demise.
Author notes
EMOTION SECRETS - contest
A contest entry
- EMOTION SECRETS by R S Adams Jr.
1100 points, ended February 19, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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oh, how sad...
You had me in through the whole poem. It develops a theme and forms a question which is answered in the end...and all makes sense, but a sad sense and a fitting end to a truly wonderful poem.
It is right on, as far as the theme of the contest is concerned and you have a wonderful poem.
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Wow... the creative word choice and the deep imagery really won me over here... this was really great.. I am actually left a little speechless... not that you should need it but good luck in the contest.
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Emotive and Deep
I love your interesting rhyming scheme (cries, prize bribes, eyes etc etc). The rhymes were subtly imbedded in the free verse. Overall, the texture of the poem was nicely painted. I could sense the emotiveness and depth. It's clever and inspirational.
snap snap snap
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well penned piece...I enjoy the dark reads..insightful..thought provoking...well paced...background and font kill the eyes tho..
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possible edit
May I suggest "love's demise' with the apostrophe of ownership.
...nuisance typo perhaps, on the last line too! 
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