Look at our world; A peaceful place.
Look at the children with smiling face.
Look at this memory now in the past.
Look at the peace; Why didn't it last?
Look at the mother with tears in her eyes.
Look at the child in innocence cry.
Look at their grief; Their soldier has died.
Look at this war and ask yourself why.
Look at our world; The oceans still roar.
Look at our world at peace no more
Oh Lord up above--
Send us mercy! Send us love!
Take our grief! Take our pain!
Make our world at peace again!
Look at the rose; Its petals still bright.
Look at the bird; Still winging its flight.
Look at the river; Still flows to the sea.
Look at these thoughts that no longer can be.
Look at the rose; Its petals have died.
Look at the bird with nowhere to fly.
Look at the river, now stained with blood.
Look at our world in absence of love
Look at our world now torn apart.
Look at the grief that has entered the heart.
Look at the sin that rules overall.
Look at the man who no longer stands tall.
Look at the child who cries out in fear.
Look at the greed we cherish so dear.
Look at our world with its contents of shame.
Look now on us who are to blame.
Oh Lord up above--
Send us mercy! Send us love!
Take our grief! Take our pain!
Make our world at peace again!
Amen!
Author notes
Contest 5 OPTION -- Prewrites allowed by Florida Sunshine
Option: 1
This was written during the Vietnam era. It is still relevant today.
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A contest entry
- 5 OPTION -- Prewrites allowed by Florida Sunshine.
525 points, ended July 29, 2008, 28 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Excellent
The repetition gives this poem so great intensity. You captured the image so well as you sweep across the mind with your words. Congrats on the honorable mention
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All True.
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"War is not healthy for children and other living things",,,So much happening in the world today AL that we have little or no control over.All we can hope to do is try to change things one step at a time. If enough of us stand up and be counted for , we'll at least be on the way.....Excellent write,strong and thought provoking......mal
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If only this were to become the prayer of human hearts everywhere. Blessed be dearest Poet! This touched my soul.
Az
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Aww this is sooo soo moving!
Aww this is sooo soo moving! Bless you for such a heartfelt poem of great mangitude and feeling, you are so altruisitc and caring and this is a pehnomenal piece of poetic perfection. Love it, well done write on and amen on this wonderful poem too. Love it.
Poetic Hugs,
Kaz.
Kazytc xx
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Merry meet,
Congratulations on winning another Honorable Mention.
You really blow me away. I know that you state in your authors' notes that this was written during Vietnam, but what came to my mind was 9/11.
I love how you hammer at us, forcing us to look, daring us to look away from what we have done. Wonderful work!
Amythest
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It would be nice... No wars nor eavel people tramping on the innocent. But it will never be as long as there is greed and someone to hate.
But i agree with the poem. I wish too.
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Sure is! Wow- impressive write. I like it... I know there are a lot of people who may look at the structure of this piece and say, you need to lose the... repeat lines. I would completely disagree. Truly believe that is the strength behind the words.
"Look at the rose; Its petals still bright.
Look at the bird; Still winging its flight.
Look at the river; Still flows to the sea.
Look at these thoughts that no longer can be.
Look at the rose; Its petals have died.
Look at the bird with nowhere to fly.
Look at the river, now stained with blood.
Look at our world in absence of love"
I like it... Thanks for entering into the contest ~ It was my pleasure reading your work.
Best of luck to you,
Florida Sunshine
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Tis very much still relevant today. I found that the poem had some very stark truths, the world isn't a very peacful place. Its wrought by all the things you described. I like the way you tempered it with hope....great poem
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I love the thought of a harmonious world where people are working together to solve environmental and economical problems instead of trying to do it by warring on other countries, fighting over oil and resources. There are bigger problems just down the road that everyone needs to unite and work on together. The days of war should be long over. It's a bad philosophy and brings us down as intelligent human beings. There must be a better way, blow for blow and eye for eye, soon we will all be blind.
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Amazing write Dear. Yes it is still relevant today and will be in the future Its such a Damn Shame.
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oh my this was the all in all
you amazed me with this poem
it could be a song
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Wonderful
Hi there poet friend, just read your poem and once again I am in awe of your writes.You have great talent and speak with your heart, and all your writes that i have read so far, have much wisdom woven within them.Your poem speaks volumes and also speaks truth.It is sad that our world is like this.If only we could all learn to love and forgive,to have faith and to be thankful for what we have, and not to want for more.So many want material things in their lives, but not many want the love of God, who truly can enrich us.Peace is a long way off from reaching our hearts, it's sad but true.Your write is very thought provoking as is all your writes, and I believe only when God once again rules here on earth, will we be free from wars and suffering. I truly adore the way you write and your thoughts, and you are always a pleasure to read.
Take care and many blessings to you.
Angel.
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Awesome!!!
this is a really great poem!!!this poem can totally relate to what is going on today!!there is so much troubling issues with the world today that peace isn't being given a chance to actually help the people of the world..as long people have hope, one day there will be peace!!!great write!!much much love!!!
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This seems incredibly relevant today, sadly we have too much pain, too much sadness, and way too much greed. Wonderfully touching.
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i agree
this is our world now and i remember nam
hated it then hate it now
this is a great poem
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Thanks for entering this thought-provoking piece in my contest. It was an enjoyable read. Only when God rules here on earth will we be free from war and suffering.
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You show yourself to be a very strong individual ... I am simply positive that being over seas makes you write so much ... there is so much to learn ... live ... and find ... that makes you search deep within yourself ... you have done that in ever piece I have read ... I love your style, I love your form, hell, I think I love you! lol ... I know ... it's a bit out there ... but from your poetry ... you are one hell of a man! Thank you a gain for sharing this wonderful piece with us
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aw a wonderful song.
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oh, amazing, perfect flow, yet the message is so verry clear....Wonderful, and thanks for the read!!!!
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