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Twinkle Twinkle CPR

Little Bo Peep was looking for sheep

But couldn't find any at all,

So she asked Humpty Dumpty to have a quick look

From his seat high up on a wall,

"Of course" said Humpty sitting up high

"I can see most of the land"

"Much further you know than anyone else"

"Even better if I were to stand"

Poor old Humpty overbalanced and fell

Tumbling onto the ground,

Just as Little Boy Blue appeared with his horn

And saw Humpty was making no sound,

"What shall we do" cried Little Boy Blue

"He really needs CPR"

"Don't worry my dear" said a voice somewhere near

It belonged to nurse Twinkle the Star,

She flew over to Humpty where Little Bo Peep

Sat gently holding his hand,

Then Twinkle the Star commenced CPR

And bought Humpty back to this land,

Little Bo Peep never did find her sheep,

Good old Humpty was fine within hours,

His saviour, a star, who knew CPR,

Was rewarded with a bouquet of flowers. 

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  • kavi22
    August 2, 2008
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    This was very cute and catchy, I liked it


  • nature mithya
    July 18, 2008

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    This mix is good.

    With this CPR thing I hope you can bring the real Humpty Dumpty back on the wall.
    nice write though.


  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    April 28, 2008
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    thank you for your lovely poem. I enjoyed it through and through... Unfortuneately you did not read the rules very carefully and now I would have to delete this entry. In all fairness I really have to. sorry about that.

    Lovely entry and may you turn this Bronze into a shiny GOLD soon!!!!

    All the best!
    Becks


  • WesBreezyxxx
    April 12, 2008
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    FUNNY

    I WISH I COULD GIVE YOU POINTS BUT I DON'T HAVE NONE GOOD JOB


  • cfh1167
    February 5, 2008

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    Aha!
    This is very very cute!
    I like it a lot!

    I think it is good for children as well.


  • mommyof2
    January 31, 2008

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    lol much enjoyed from beginning to end...the story and rhyme blended perfectly. Great job and best of luck!


  • Kelli Marie
    January 30, 2008

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    lol...Great!!! I loved this. It was a fun read indeed. I think you did a great job with this rewrite of the nursery rhymes. I hope you do well in the contest.
    Kelli

  • piccola silver member
    January 30, 2008

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    this made me smile all the way through. I enjoyed the story and am a sucker for rhyme too. Great job and thank you for entering

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