you promised
for all eternity
you gave me
but three weeks
you didn't just hurt me
you didn't just break me
you crushed me
you shattered me
[a million little pieces
a million
tiny
little
pieces]
i love you still
i promised you
forever and always
for all eternity
and i will keep that promise
no matter what it taxes me of
you promised
to protect me
to never hurt me
but you broke that promise
you hurt me
you left me
you say
you didn't leave me
you say
you're still here
but you're not
you're threatning
to move
out of state
you'll be gone
for good
and that kills me
[inside
where no one can see
unless they look
deep into my soul
the one you stole from me]
now i'm more broken
than before
now i'm more wary
than before
now i am more everything
than i ever was
except
i am not whole
i am not pure
i am not clean
i am not beautiful
i am
what i am
and you helped
me become
[{this}]
Author notes
Dirty and Broken
basically this is about her hurting me and how i am unable to deal with it -- i also believe that this poem is self-explanitory so this whole exercise is pointless
A contest entry
- Broken promisses... by Wolf Mistress.
1200 points, ended February 23, 2008, 39 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is a very emotional and true write here...you showed so much of you to that person who broke the promisses...It's hard to deal with a situation like that...but as I read in the comments chat talks below...things will going to work out just fine if you give them a chance...together
I loved it a lot,
good luck in my contest and good luck in your life too...
XXJeannette
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Please read the rules...
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i ddi read your rules, i just felt that the poem was self-explantory. but i did, in fact, add an explanation of the poem- just for you
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Thank you...
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you're welcome
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grawr....i hate working....this is good but i wanna talk to you and now that school is in again i hardly ever will
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y u hate working?
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hate working cuz i hate my job and i wanna talk to you just to talk to you i miss you?
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y u hate ur job?
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its just stupid
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I'm sorry. And I'm not moving ok. I promise...I'm still here. I will love you for all eternity. But your his now. He loves you so much. I'm not getting in the middle of it anymore...I'm still here and always will be. I wont let you done hun...I love you. always and for all eternity
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don't be sorry, sweetie, for things you cannot and willnot change...there's no point....
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i will change...everything i'm doing...for you, and for me. i know i need to stop what i've been doing..but it's hard..but i'm trying, for real this time. just please don't give up on me...not yet...
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*hugs as tight as i can*
i'm not giving up on you...i promise, i won't give up on you.... -
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thanks hun...i just don't know how much more i can take...
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you're welcome, sweetie.....
people can take a lot...trust me....you can do it, i know you can -
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i'll talk to you more about it later....long story..not really..just yeah..don't worry about it
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i am worried, though, you should know that
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i just have a lot on my mind..
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*sits by you close*
you can talk to me, you know that, right?
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