You take my hand and wish me well.
Now, I suffer my private hell.
Just sitting home next to the phone,
but I won't call.
Your tone has changed. Your eyes are cold.
I guess somehow I'm being told;
With nothing said; The flame is dead;
No 'Love' at all.
No one to see. Nowhere to go.
I just listen to the radio.
But then a song of love gone wrong;
I think of you.
The music falls upon my ears
and there's no holding back the tears.
Switch off the light; Call it a night
for being blue.
It's for the best that I departed.
Not a word; Just let it all end.
I'd rather not see you and be broken hearted.
I love you too much to be a 'Friend'.
I walk the streets we used to walk,
remembering how we used to talk.
Your little grin; What could've been,
will never be.
Two lovers pass; She holds him tight.
The way we were on other nights.
I start to cry and turn my eyes
so they won't see.
Someday, I may just take a chance
and fall into a new romance.
I don't know when I'll love again,
a love that's true.
I notice some with flirting eyes,
but they can never realize,
they're not for me-- There'll never be
another you.
It's for the best that I departed.
Not a word; Just let it all end.
I'd rather not see you and be broken hearted.
I love you too much to be a 'Friend'.
Author notes
*pic. courtesy of Photobucket.com
I loved you like nothing could ever be lost.
I gave you my heart without a price or a cost.
The mistake I made when I thought it was true..
was sayin three words "I Love you."
*This was written as a slow ballad when a relationship ended and I was heartbroken about it.
There are some people that can adjust their feelings from a "love" to a "friendship"; I am not one of them, at least, not in this case.
The lyrics speak for themselves.
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A contest entry
- feeling lost i want sappy stuff people by Pureisolation.
450 points, ended February 15, 2008, 45 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Lyrical Inspiration by Carpe Noctem.
300 points, ended April 12, 2008, 15 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - He Hurt Me, I Love Him by Blooming Poet.
315 points, ended February 20, 2008, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - My Broken Heart Lies Bleeding by SchizoChic.
600 points, ended February 29, 2008, 31 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Loves Pain And Heartache. by Poetryintheblood.
450 points, ended March 1, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - loving was lost or forgoten by XxemohatexX.
450 points, ended July 1, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Enter Your Best!!! (Pws allowed and more than one poem) by Intricate Wordsmith.
450 points, ended August 22, 2008, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - A Lost Love by Corinthians13-4.
520 points, ended September 11, 2008, 29 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Best Rhyming Break up Prewrites :] by Ami.
510 points, ended July 30, 55 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Have you ever felt like this?
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Wow A lot of trophies so far on this one and I see why it's
Amazing I'm happy I met another who writes lyrics
Lyrics are pretty much all I write and also sing them
Awesome write yet again Thanks for entering my contest and Good luck
-♥Amy♥
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Aww this was so heart-breaking
and deeply sorrowful.
Yet you managed to capture
beauty with the tears.
Amazing & congrats on all
trophies won
Thanks for entering & best of luck
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Outstanding
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I know exactly what you mean!! In your heart, you know that you so desperately need to move on. You need to open your heart to others. However, it isn't fair for yourself or for anyone else if you do so before you have fully moved on. And no matter how much you want to say "I'm over you," you know that it isn't true. Everything in the world reminds you of what was, and what could've been. Even though you know it could never be again. You know that they've changed. Then it occurs to you that you're not really even in love with them anymore, but rather in love with who they used to be, before that abrupt change that you never saw coming. And then a tear. And then another. And the mere idea of being just a friend... seems beyond comprehension.
Great job, and thank you for letting me read this.
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wow!
deeply moving! a heart-breaking write, beautifully penned! keep pennign!
~beauty of silence
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I am able to compare my experiences with the pain and confusion the narrator beholds. Because I could relate to this poem best of all, I might have been a little unconsciously biased. Brava!!! Great Write and Great Read!!! Thank you for entering my contest!
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Very nice! The rhythm made it a really enjoyable read! keep it up! all the best in the contests
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amazing job.
it took me until about the third verse to understand the rhythm of it but i enjoyed it once i understood it.lol.
great write. i love the word choices you made.
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oh this was so good. I've been there before. I like the repetition of one of the stanzas, which ended in, I love you to much to be a friend. Usually, I'm not fond of repeated stanzas, but that was perfect placement. I love the rhyme scheme too. It's really good, but in some places shakey. Great job and good luck in the contest
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This was an amazing write. It was very sad. I could feel your pain in your words. It made me want to cry. It's a relatable piece. Nicely done.
~Vampy~
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WOW!!! that was amazing to say the least. I could feel the pain&struggle of every word. Just a heart looking to be loved for all the love it has gave. PERFECTION!! Very relateable aswell. Great job
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Thank you for your entry in our contest with this very interesting romantic lyric which would be lovely set to music, we enjoyed this very much.
Please join us in our next contest...Sue and Jeff
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Yes I have felt like this and know many others whom feel this way as well thank you for this entry, it is so bearutiful and brought a quiet tear to my eye. Best of luck.
"I walk the streets we used to walk
remembering how we used to talk.
Your little grin; What could've been
will never be.
Two lovers pass; She holds him tight.
The way we were on other nights.
I start to cry and turn my eyes
so they won't see."
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Yeah you have no idea thank you so much for entering...Such a well written poem...yet another great poem from a great poet..
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some times i do believe that you can love someone too. it hurts you to love them and they dont even know it. good poem. thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! NineTailedFox
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Excellent
Oh my goodness.
I really don't know what to say my friend.
For once, I am speechless.
Congratulations on your most deserved Silver, Bronze and both of your Honourable Mentions.
Best of luck to you in the other ongoing contest.
Well done.
Keep up with the great work.
Keep on penning.
Thank you so very much for sharing your wonderful talents with us.
*S* Cynthia
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WOW
I love it! Very sad, I am truely sorry you felt this way. I could hear your heart crying as I read the words. Vry touching.
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wow
very sad.. i felt my heart crying too.. as i thought if my love wouldn't love me no more.. i'd die
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Thank you for your heartfelt entry, you spoke my words exactly as if looking right through me, I understand your write completely, good luck, Josie
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Made me want to cry
This is so beautiful and full of emotions that I for one can relate too.
You write such wonderful " Love Stories "
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This is just wow. I like this alot.
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Beautiful! I feel the emotion and sadness radiating from this...
"It's for the best that I departed;
Not a word; Just let it all end.
I'd rather not see you and be broken hearted
I love you too much to be a friend."
I loved that part~ :]
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Awful? No! This is a mastepiece!
Goodluck in my contest!
xxx
Eli -
wow
wow Al, this is so beautiful and sad...i am just like u..if a realtionship ends i can't really try to be just a friend..it would be too hard..i mean i would try but its just too much to be just a friend.this is a great poem!much much love...
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Great. Thank you for sharing I love it.
I see the girls with flirting eyes;
Fav Line
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Oh my God. This was exactly what I was looking for! You nearly made me cry, because that is how I feel, too. You captured such pure, raw emotion in such beautifully written lines. Thanks SO much for entering, and best of luck!
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It's truely emotional poem. I know how you feel. great job and thanks for entering.
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awwww i know what you mean, great write! lovely job
stephanie
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This made me feel really sad... it's really nice. Well, nice in the sense written wise, not the actually contents.
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Very well written what a great song well not great in the emotional aspect but written Good luck with this in the contest.
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yup know this feeling all to well! wish you the best in the contest
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Wow
I really like this. With the right music, I really think this would touch a lot of people. It's really true, I like it a lot.
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wow...I want to print this poem/ song out and leave it on my ex boyfriends door step, seriously...really really well written. I lovef this piece so much..thank you for sharing this poem seriously.
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