You meet a girl and you believe
that you're too smart to be deceived.
Yes, you a guy who knows the score
through lessons learned from years before
and yet, though foolishly, you know,
you let your true emotions grow.
But still, you hide your feelings deep
inside of you and try to keep
the secret of your 'Hasty Heart'
that recently began to start
to beat more rapidly, it seems,
reliving anew, once broken dreams.
But, maybe she's the one for you
and maybe now, your search is through.
~~~
So, you introduce her to your friend,
knowing not, that it would end
with you, so quickly, bowing out
for the guy she cared the 'Least' about.
~~~
Now again, you must defend your pride,
though secretly, you know you've cried.
But to them, you laugh and play it cool
and you wonder how you could be the fool
to let yourself be hurt again
by the girl you loved and the guy; Your 'Friend'.
~~~
Now again, you keep yourself confined
to solitude of heart and mind.
And again, you build that 'Lonely Wall'
to protect you, just in case you fall.
'Cause you fear that if you love again,
it will mean that you'll be hurt again;
A hurt that you can't bear again,
So thus, you stay alone!
~~~
"A Rock feels no pain--
An Island never cries!"
(Simon & Garfunkle)
Author notes
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*You find out you've been cheated on.--You're mad; You're hurt, and you start kicking yourself in the butt that you didn't see it coming.
You swear to yourself you will never let that happen again.
You toughen up and resolve to never let anyone get close to you again.
In time---You get over it!
In a list
A contest entry
- Dark Poetry Options by RX-Queen.
375 points, ended February 19, 2008, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Enemies With Friendly Faces by Dead Hair.
525 points, ended April 21, 2008, 34 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Streetcorner by malmadre.
1000 points, ended June 1, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love and Regret by Voodoo Eyes.
600 points, ended July 1, 2008, 27 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Shattered Mirrors and Cherry Pies by swim.x.
450 points, ended August 9, 2008, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
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900 points, ended August 11, 2008, 79 entries
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Have you ever been afraid to enter a new relationship?
Comments
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wow, this is a truly great poem. thanks for entering my contest. Im honored. hehe, to answer your above question, yes i have been afraid to enter a new relationship. Its hard at first but you have to trust that person and if you don't then, maybe you shouldn't be going out with that person.
Kaycee
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YES
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Oh my gosh, this deserves so much recognition. This is amazing and I loved it. The rhyme scheme was amazing, and the rhythm was very smooth (but in one or two places could be better) but overall...brava, this was so good. It was a pleasure to read
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This was written so well with absolutely no rhyming flaws. It flowed beautifully and made it an exceptionally easy read for my mind. Just because it read well means its amateur. You've evidently put a heap of time thinking about the proper wording for this. I congratulat eyou on a job well done.
Good luck,
Chin up,
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wow
hey great job a whole
lot better than mine
this was very easy to capture the
emotions
well written this truly did
diserve gold!!
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This was very good. The song "My Guitar Gently Weeps" by the Beatles from Across the Universe came on my itunes as I was reading this and it was so cool. LOL. This is a great poem. Thanks for the entry!
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This fits so well with feelings of dejection and bruised egos and broken hearts, looking for a place to heal even if it's a dark street.
I like the rhymed couplets and the last two verses that begin "now again" and then "again" repeated near the end, bringing to mind, us poor creatures falling in love in a vicious hurtful cycle. Well done!
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love will never possess - it will only love
nice work Al ...
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Beautiful, the words, flow, and story were all amazing! The lyrics at the end was the cherry on top of this angst cake (I love Simon and Garfunkle!).
Honestly, I did not expect anything about 'cheating'. When I made this contest, I was more focused on friend v. friend. This was a wonderful surprise.
I especially love the stanza:
'So, you introduce her to your friend,
knowing not, that it would end
with you, so quickly, bowing out
for the guy she cared the 'Least' about.'
Well done!
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no girls are evil bitches who will rip your heart out and fees it back to you while laughing about it to your friends. i should know! i'm a girl! your poem was great! loved the entire thing. thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! NineTailedFox
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Excellent
Oh my goodness.
What a powerfully penned piece of poetry.
I would totally be flipping out on the both of them.
If, it was the other way around.
Wonderfully penned piece of poetry my friend.
Congratulations on your most deserved Gold trophy.
VERY well deserved.
Best of luck to you in the other two contests.
Well done.
Keep up with the great work.
Keep on penning.
Thank you so very much for sharing your wonderful talents with us.
*S* Cynthia
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Great write! You expressed emotion very well. Good job and good luck in the contest!
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Though sad, but I love it
Thnx for entering & Best of Luck
GloriousGift
Heba -
oh this is so sad
but aleast we know we had the courage to love
this reminds me of that old saying
better to have loved
then to have never loved at all
very emotional poem my friend
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nice poem
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hey
wow that was great very few poets can rhyme and make it make sense the feelings were felt and the message was got the lines the words the flow you could feel the betrayal and hurt in your words alone it was well written and had a great flow it was great it is a poem people can relate to and thats the key to a great poem
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oh wow,i love this.
you are very talented.
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Really great piece. I felt the emotion and I am so sorry if this really happened to you. I know someone who did this to my friend and I saw how hard it was for him. Great write, thanks for entering and good luck.
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Great write. It's so hard to be open to love when we have been hurt over and over again. It's so hard to play it cool when all we want is to be loved. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.
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wow
this poem is beautifully written..great rhyme scheme.sometimes when one has been cheated on, you'll forgive but will never forget..thats me...i get scared sometimes when i get close to someone but i try my best to let them in...much much love!!
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Wow, this is powerful. Thank you for this lovely entry.
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Ahh I know the feeling of the betrayal of a girlfrind as well as a friend. Its never easy to deal with even you've had to deal with it multiple times. It really makes you afraid to love and even afraid to like. its a great poem though.
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Hey, thanks for the comment on my poem! ^^
I quite like this poem you have created. It has a nice flow and was interesting while reading, I didn't get bored.
I would say it's not a good idea to block your feelings for a girl whom you like or love, unless you haven't made friendship. That would be a different case, u would have to create a friendship first. -
YEah felt this way too Dang ex left me for an older woman same age as his dad ehhh Great write Nice flow and Rhyme
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Do you ? I guess so in time.
I read this over twice to absorb your words, you have shown deep thoughts here. The hurt the pain the loss and above all, the sadness behind the smile.
hugs x
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I almost entered this contest. The lost and found one? but my muse deserted me. She's disloyal lol. I like this write...it rhymes well and does tell a story we can follow from beginning to end. thanks for your entry.
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Love the Simon and Garfunkle quote. It's so easy to shut down and withdraw withon ourselves in order to avoid further pain. So often we can turn to other comforts as well. Even promiscuity can be an escape for some. Many partners keeps you from getting too close to any one person. I've seen it in others, and I've faught it in myself. It isn't until I remember that Christ is sufficient that I can move on. And I need to be reminded of that quite a bit!
My favorite part was about your "hasty heart," just liked the change in rythm through those lines. Very nice, and I hope you've found happiness since then.
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This is everything
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