Tears and Phoenixes

a
Tear
falls.
Echo's
rain down,
in salty water.
Hue spewed with,
vivid emotion, dry.
In every tear a flame
takes new flight, ignite.
Pristine gemstones lace,
the shades of your shirt.
Drops of deceit rain in,
a hollow heart. Falling
tear drop, drop, drop.
In drops of liquid hue
Phoenixes are born.

In your tears, I find:

Creation.

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Vir: Schane

A contest entry

BLOW MY MIND! with Shape Poetry by Tam. 900 points, ended January 31, 2008, 10 entries
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Make this THE largest Contest EVER on AP [enter, enter, enter!] by Symphony. 18000 points, ended April 28, 2009, 981 entries
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Symphony
April 18, 2009

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Love love the way you formed this, and worded it -

So beautiful, and the weaving between tears and the phoenix itself was managed well!

Can't critique is as I wouldn't suggest changing anything!

thanks for entering
Makaskill
April 15, 2008

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Wow...This is a beautiful piece of art...The shape makes it even more interesting...Thanks for sharing...Shalom
Tam
January 31, 2008

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well done!
masterfully drawn shape and message...
excellent execution within the form too...
Thank you for sharing your time and talent with me!
Blessings! Tammy
DrunkenRam
January 30, 2008
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This is a good one, the verse is in line with the picture well also.
Good Luck in the contest.