Lips seep sighs
as lids peel back
to a digital view;
beneath quilted comfort,
snooze plays
in loops
of raindrop songs sung.
In a list
A contest entry
- Pimp up my prewrites by leander.
650 points, ended February 21, 2008, 108 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Congrats on the gold!!
Wow a gorgeous piece, I really like your work, you make it all look so easy. Or is it just me that has difficulties?
Mornings aren't the best time of day, but you have made them sound wonderful. Congrats on a much deserved gold 
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Nice, caught the moment
The poet's greatest challenge is 'freezing the moment of time' and then bringing it to life in your words. Looks like it was a golden moment for you. Well done, poetess.
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And just before I go to bed I had to read this once again...
You know, I'm kinda desperately hoping I'll be awoken by this lullaby in a few hours (instead of Jovy's snore)
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Ooh, it's you
How I hate those mornings as well, when you're rotting in your bed and suddenly, that alarm-clock starts to yell at you
I squich snooze between 3 and 7 times before I get out of my comfortable bed
Jovy isn't always happy with that but hey, he snores, I snooze
Thanks for this entry hun, I love it to pieces!
Leander -
excellent~
Could just feel this one sweetie...
Love the imagery you used in it as well
Best of luck in the contest...
It's a winner in my book
Hugs
Susan~~~
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*sigh*
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Short and beautiful
Lovely writing .. sensual .. -
Well now I know where you have been hiding. Let me know when you've had your
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We will do some coffee talk
Blessings & Much Love~
~Joy
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great alliteration in this piece.. i like the long e's and the oo's.. i am not sure about the songs sung at the end.. almost a bit too much right there..
but overall- i really do like this piece very much
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I SEE.... YOU THERE! Peeking out from this cozy quilted verse.Nicely done Poetess.
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what a read! This is by all means wonderfully expressed. You have such a way with words.... great work my lovely sis, I am sure this will steal the gold!!
MEl
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lol love the imagery of this! I know I wouldn't want to get out of the blankies best to you in the contest ~blessings always~ Trisha
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Heh...
You're sleepy.
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snooze plays in loops... oh i could just feel that. the warm snuggly blankets and the comfort of rolling over right back into sleep. mmm...
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