All these years you made me feel so alone,
Because of you I come from a broken home.
You were never around to give me love,
You were never around when times were tough.
I had always hoped that you would love me,
I had always hoped meeting you would be a breeze.
Breathing heavily when we decided to talk,
Having met you, I'm glad you walked.
Birthdays and holidays pass by year after year,
You not being here made me shed tear after tear.
What did I do wrong that made me a mistake to you?
That is what you called me, is it really true?
All these years you sent child support,
All I wanted from you was love and comfort.
I dreamt of a father-daughter relationship,
But being related to you feels like sh**.
I fu**ing hate you 'cause you made me feel alone,
Glad you're not here to see the woman in me that has grown.
Because of your absense, mom raised me strong,
In my life you don't belong.
If I was a boy, would you love me more?
If so, then you're a fu**ing a**hole to the core!
When I was sick, you were never here,
You were too busy with other women and your career.
How come you don't want me?
Do you feel free?
If I was dead, would you come to my wake?
I hope you feel guilty with every breath that you take.
You have no idea of the woman I've become,
I don't know if you're just plain stupid or just dumb.
You never attempted to call or write,
Day by day you feel contrite.
I would envy children being with their dads,
Because a dad is someone I've never had.
Seeing a complete family would make me cry,
Tears upon my face fall from my eyes.
Years still go by without a word,
Being a burden I won't endure.
You left an empty space in my heart,
You tore me to pieces; you tore me apart.
You didn't help me in any way, shape, or form,
Sometimes I would wish that I hadn't been born.
You were suppose to be my protector,
But you're nothing but a failure.
Here I am today,
A woman that didn't need you're love anyway!
Without you I thought I was nothing,
But my mom helped me feel something.
I don't need you or your love,
I have my mom and I thank the good Lord above!
Author notes
name is kim. when I wrote this, I was watching a re-run of 7th Heaven and saw a happy loving family.The dad was there and I had wished for mine to come see me...This poem is how I feel when my dad never tried to talk to me..I had to make the first move..this poem is very personal so please don't judge too harshly.
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Coming from a broken home, I can relate to this well. But I never let the fact that I never used to see my dad get to me the way it did you so that's a whole new perspective for me. I honestly thought it was a rare thing for a family to still be together so I never paid it much mind that mine wasn't.
Now, on to me being a harsh judge... This poem would probably sound a lot better if you wouldn't have forced the rhyming. If it was hard to think of things to rhyme then you shouldn't have rhymed the poem at all. Also, the beat was off. Rhyming is a tricky thing to do (that's why I avoid it) and if you don't watch the way you word things, it can cause the poem to look tacky and poorly planned out. Luckly, there were only a few spots in this poem that I saw that. You did a wonderful job beside all of that. Btw, don't take my critisms too seriously, I'm just pretty open with my opinions. Thanks for entering and good luck with the other contests!
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I too cam from a broken home and could really relate to this but I do not think that it is unnecessary to blame parents for your problems. We all have something in our past that defines us, that helps shape us... If you blame everything that is wrong with you TODAY on someone else, that is kind of irresponsible I think...
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I dreamt of a father-daughter relationship,
Because of your absense, mom raised me strong,
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I can understand what you're trying to say...but im not trying to display blatently to the world about my father...I was jsut writign how i felt when i watch 7th heaven thats all..
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Tarja
excuse me but i'm not blaming any problems on my parents. i dont have any problems whatsoever. this Poem was about my father never being there period! i first met him when i turned 19.thats a pretty long time!so i think you got confused somehow..i have a wonderful life with my mother.. -
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I didn't meet my father until I was 14 and to this day I have tried and tried to make a relationship with him... but I just don't think it's right displaying someone else's faults for the world to see so blantently... I mean... unless it WAS REALLY bad like... killing someone.. you know? Don't mean to be a bug... that's just what I think.
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