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Love's Portal


stars were synchronized
two hearts need love's fullfillment
portal door opens

beams of ardor flowed to them
captured, as the door locked

Author notes

Dedicated to my UK friend.

This is a tanka.

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  • Visit.Me.On.Mars
    January 8

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    Very nice !
    Im trying to learn this stlye and it can be challenging
    thak you entering
    its a lovely poem
    good luck
    ----Janette


    • HeartTangles
      January 8
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      Thank you

      What I like best about tanka is that there is a pivot in the last 2 lines. They usually tell a story or give something to think about. The pivot is different than the first 3 lines. But yet about the same subject or a different way to think about it all. It is kind of like the aha of the poem. Some do not do the pivot and just write 5 lines which is not my favorite. Haiku is like that too, but does not have as many lines to fulfill the task. I like tanka and once mastered, it is hard to stop.
      Reading tanka seems to help while trying to learn to write them.


  • EmotionalLandscapes
    January 8

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    very enjoyable piece

    The indelible effect concerning the interactions of the heart, whether portals open or closed. Its impact within memory. A really enticing piece requiring enjoyable engagement of the heart to appreciate its touchie-feelie impact. A great addition to your collection.