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Falter

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I fall with the rain, to earth
Shattering into a million pieces
Then scrambling across the surface
Before falling, lost, in the creases
I lay awake in a half-conscious state
Sliding between reality and not
Edging through those questions
Which no one else dare sought
I leap into the lake, and can't swim
I succumb to what it is that shall be
Gasping for my last breaths of air
And in letting go, I finally break free.

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  • Rheea gold member
    January 29, 2008
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    I think you are on to something here.. and it is called life... beautiful


  • albymyheart gold member
    January 29, 2008

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    Clever

    Great metaphor and interesting how the continuation of it keeps you flowing with the water (and the poem.) Describes the emotion well. Innovative and clever...alby


  • sapphireangelwings
    January 29, 2008

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    This is very thought provoking. Several things crossed my mind as I read from intensely sensual to highly emotional! Great job getting my mind going at this late hour! Simply put.....beautiful read!