Fingers wrapped in hair,
Thumbs brushing cheeks
Flush with secret hopes,
And then breath mingles
Inside mouths
Somehow entwined,
In our first kiss.
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This little poem is quite intense for a first reading and for a first kiss. Good job.
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bravo
Oops! I've already commented! I still love it! So short, so succinct and sooo rooomantic and deftly done! I loved it, loved it! bravo... bravo... bravo... -
Dearest Em,
now you have painted and portrayed a kiss and a sigh, loved the fingers wrapped in hair and the usage of flush with secret hopes,
you nailed it!
heart-hugs and smiles
Yvette
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bravo
Short but extremely potent piece of poetry, like a whispered, lovely love philtre! Excellent! Loved it! bravo... bravo... bravo...
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I knew I had to read this one just by the preview lines. At first glance it's very easy to read it quickly and say "ok that's cute" and leave it at that... but there's a little more to be found on repeat readings. Nice work
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daisy your first kiss sounds far better than mine.mine was stolen in the back seat of the cinema and made my neck ache waiting to do it
A wonderful little piece that says far more that it seems Excellent
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Well, Ms. Daisy.....Awwwwwwwwwww......this is just WONDERFUL!!!
I'm not gonna say another word, but let's just say, yeah...it was just like THAT
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Love ya, sweets,
Jin
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Awww, that's such a pretty poem
Great flow and such!
Hope to see more of your work,
~*~* Angel *~*~
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