Love is religion that's there to be used,
A meaning to life that is always abused.
Love is a stone wall, a kiss made of steel
Where freedom's unreachable, dreams can't be real.
Love is the ivy that chains up the stone
And higher and higher the prison is grown.
Love is a country held down by a king,
The matador teasing the bull in the ring.
Love is a catholic repressed by the pope,
His own contradiction, the breaching of hope.
Love is the priest to the innocent child,
Confessing your sins to the meek and the mild.
Love doesn't think you can nourish your needs,
He owns and controls you, commands you and leads.
Love is Iraq to a white christian man,
Hand killing muslims he feeds in his hands.
Love's too religious, the cleansing of souls,
The church to the beggar that taxes and tolls.
To love is to perish in somebody's hands,
To give and submit to the other's demands.
Author notes
These are my particular feelings about love when it gets too intense, involved and obsessive, it is about that time in a relationship where you feel you cannot escape, that love has held you prisoner and you just want to be free from the chains. Sometimes, love can get "too religious".
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I loved the lines "Love is a catholic repressed by the pope,
His own contradiction, the breaching of hope." Great poem overall, rhyming is harder than it seems and I really enjoyed thi -
when love makes you feel like a prisoner, it isnt love anymore. i like the way you emphasized the control obsessive 'love' has, without seeming repetitiv
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Just as a point of clarification, what is the line "Hand killing muslims he feeds in his hands." supposed to mean? It wasn't clear. In fact, a lot of this could have been put a little more clearly, especially nearer the end of the poem. Overall, great write.
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Hand killing muslims he feeds in his hands is talking about iraq as a person, as well as bombing and shooting soldiers from the west, iraq kills his own citizens too.
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I liked it
I liked this, once again filled with angst of contrasting images. Good job !
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Wow!! Very, very strong! I like it, I really do... a perfect portrayal of the dangers of love when it becomes too obsessive, it really illustrates and coveys that feeling of being trapped, whether because you love someone but it's out of habit, or whether you're in a relationship where the other person is very controlling, or posessive. They erode you like acid, people like that. A great piece.
Nice rhyme scheme, by the way.
God bless,
ELW x
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Oooh, I like this one, very strong! It reminds me of a baptist preacher preaching profoundly about sin. I will try to applaud this one, I don t know if my applause is working though
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This was so powerful. The comparisons between love and the catholic church were uniquely poetic. A little sad though and negative. Love can be good, but the feeling of ownership is very evident here.
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Oh so POWERFUL!
"To love is to perish in somebody's hands,
To give and submit to the other's demands." If you don't mind I'd like to make a change that illustrates my understanding of Love."To love is to perish into His hands, To give & submit to His Great Commands!" This was an excellent write. Bravo, kudos, & it's "all of that"!
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well done
I think that comparing love to the bs war(s) in the middle east is pretty original
and nice repetition
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This is a lot of ideas of what love really is, personally I agree with some of it and they are all good answers. I like your choice of words as well
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This is a very deep poem... I like the feeling of obsessiveness... I think there may a little too much repitition - but that is just me
... I really enjoyed this piece and I'm surprised it didn't place
Keep writing
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Damn... there a LOT of deep stuff in there!! I will need to read it a few times to really absorb all the messages... My fav is the last stanza... gosh I've been there!!!
Wonderful job!!!
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Wow! poet, that's deep stuff for sure, lemme take it in slowly one line @ a time
You wrote:
"Love is a stone wall, a kiss made of steel
Where freedom's unreachable, dreams can't be real."
Oh jesus, yes, how true. "Where freedom's unreachable" and yet is there not some added freedom as opposed to the slavery of loneliness?
We get tired of our freedoms so very soon, and then chafe to return to "the other side."
Let me read some more of this before I comment further.
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I like..
I really like this one. It's nice
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Interesting comparisons here. It almost sounded like a chapter out of Proverbs and not because of the religious references but because they are especially profound and convey an adage effect. Thanks for sharing!
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What a sad commentary on love! It's definately not always perfect, but is worth it when you find the right one. I agree with TabbyJoy's comments. As to the poetic nature of the poem, very natural rhyme and clever wording. I also like at the metaphors! Very well done.
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True, when we place our faith fully in another human being, it is a futile devotion. Because people always fail. No earthly love can fulfill our needs. True love is found in this: caring for those who cannot care for themselves.
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i really like this poem it shows how you feel in a very strong way, it makes me look at my relationships and i can see a resmbelace to what you are saying, i find the stanza
Love doesn't think you can nourish your needs,
He owns and controlls you, commands you and leads.
it really gets through to me how a relationship can become one sided and controlling, a well penned poem keep writeing youv got allot of talent
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