frigidity relinquishes;
counterfeit translucence
hides incognito
not fallen yet
discarded dreams on feather pillows
knowing what it would be like to be
extra virgin...
as relentless as it is warm;
she whispers
your name in hope
frozen now,
she will
thaw...
Author notes
L1 levanto http://allpoetry.com/poem/3554598
L2 recalling Neil Young http://allpoetry.com/poem/3464492
L3-4 - incognito http://allpoetry.com/poem/3494780
L5 - yesterday http://allpoetry.com/poem/3534254
L6-7 - extra virgin http://allpoetry.com/poem/3512760
L7-10 signing http://allpoetry.com/poem/3580320
L11-L13 old news http://allpoetry.com/poem/3703472
A contest entry
- Piece by Piece by Nicole Hanna.
300 points, ended February 3, 2008, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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healing takes a while
Thankfully, we can heal.
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"frozen now,
she will
thaw..."
wowow! that's beautiful, elaine! it seems and reads like a complete poem; not made up of bits! great job!
- namita
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yo check it i be readin yo poem and i says to myself dat gotta hoit yo you gots to get hoit to get da blues yo but still me likes me likes yes i do
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great work elaine
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thanks
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"as relentless as it is warm;
she whispers
your name in hope"
love those lines.
Such a beautifully written poem, has a delicate sound to the words that read so nicely.
excellent.
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extra virgin... now that's a concept that is entirely too appealing for it's own good. lol. And really, you took this idea and ran with it. Some of the entries used large chunks from their poems, but I can see that this short piece came from a myriad of poems and that's wonderful how easily it all falls together into one cohesive piece. Thanks for the entry.
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Thank you for the wonderful contest idea, and for the accolade...
what i actually found in the poems i used was that there are way to many constant or recurring themes and that in fact i verge on being boring
as for first pressed extra virgin - for some very strange reason whenever i see that on an expensive bottle of olive oil i always think "i wish" lol! oh to be first pressed and virgin all over again and know just half of what i know now
again, my thanks
elaine
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Oh this is beautiful and it all meld together so smoothly, Elaine.
I want to thaw too...and just melt and flow away
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~ Nicolette
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I want to thaw, too
this is beautiful. You do have a gift for using vocabulary without creating a sense of heaviness...
light, and powerful
I hope you thawed
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thaw? nah not yet
i am practicising the art of frigidity
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Good stuff
I liked it BEFORE I understood what the process was.
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Holy crap... this is piece by piece? I never would have guessed. Excellently put together.
wow...
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WOW. i mean, WOW. that's insane, that's incredible! i can't believe... whew.... i couldn't have taken that one on. although it is tempting... still, you made an excellent piece, completely coherent and delightful all in itself (and extra virgin really is my favourite. reminds me of standing in the grocery store with my mom, laughing like dirty old men). still. bravo.
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damn.. that's pretty damned good... a bit like Burroughs with his cut and paste type of poetry..
Bowie used to do that as well to write songs... just imagine the weird stuff he came up with...?
hehehh
grand grand grand
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wow...you have put these lines from your poems together so well, I think that this would be so hard to do and have a poem with metaphor and that makes sense like this...well done!
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very nicely done, what a great idea for a contest and what a great entry in it....
al
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