My most enjoyable moments
are sitting by the window
with a cup of coffee,
watching the rain
Rhythmic sounds
of raindrops falling
on the sidewalk,
bouncing jewels upward
at odd angles.
Tiny ripples ever expanding,
relaxing my body,
cleansing my mind
of all thought.
It is then that I see
only you
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LIONHEART
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Good job on this. Good luck and keep writing!! -
'rain and coffee' for me it such a 'toxic' combination but a delightful one...for we only think of 'moments of love' thank you sharing this piece...
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Amazing. I enjoyed this. It was good. You had some good imaganary going on in this. It was awsome. Thank youfor entering and best of luck too you in the contest!
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beautiful write.
great imagery.
thanks for entering.
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Beautiful job thanks for entering and good luck!
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'bouncing jewels upward' - I loved this part. Beautifully written. Thank you and good luck in my contest
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Rain is my favorite time.
I can relate to this poem, very well. For I too have sat many times when its raining on my balchony with a *cup of tea* just watching and listening to the rain.. its quite peaceful. Love it, keep writing!
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I really enjoy this write. Its a very sweet piece. I too enjoy the soothing sounds of rain drops faliing. Especially living in a house with a tin roof! So nice. Good job and good luck! -
see i feel the same with this piece i am left wanting so much more. but again you set this up so well, and this piece had some very amazing wording such as 'bouncing jewels upward' so well penned.
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Nice beginning and wow! Nice ending. This was refreshing to read. It shows your talent. Thanks for entering and thanks for sharing. Welcome to the finalist.
Love,
Evemauy
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hmm... i like this. it was very relaxing to read.
best of luck in my contest.
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great work i love it personly i dont like rain i love to go outside and enjoy the sun but you sure did great making rain sound so fun nice work and keep it up. good luck
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Thank you very much Flowergirl
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Brief, clear and very lovely. Thanks for entering.
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Thanks for your entry. This is really wonderful
Good luck in the contest!
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Thank you for your beautifully spoken entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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This is beautiful. I love the picture and atmosphere it creates. I love the last lines:
"It is then that I see
Only you."
Thank you so much for entering and for the lovely poem.
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This was very sweet. Thank you for entering.
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a tender and loving write, good luck in the contest with this lovely read
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I love the term "bouncing jewels"
you've created a pleasent, relaxing atmosphere for your readers and judge.
I also liked the ending stanza, when we are at our most vunerable we tend to think about somebody we care about.
Thank you for entering,
fantastic job!
Best of luck!
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I actually like how you go from an impersonal subject matter such as rain, to suddenly seeing one person, and those two lines are what says the most to me. I don't like the 'bouncing jewels' image, as it strikes me as little cliche, or the cleansing of the mind, because water is general attributed to "cleansing", so it felt overused. But again, I realy enjoyed the transition and the suddenness of seeing someone. Without saying it, you've expressed the love for that person
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i see no reason to rewrite this. i think to change it would change the feelings you've put into it. the person you see is truly blessed. i hope they know this. for if i can hear the raindrops so should they.the water is all your emotions spilling out to this person. -
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Thank you, G. Mama
for your kind words. You are right about the water.
Richard
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nice
i like it as is awesome!
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I could definitely identify with this poem.
The imagery was very beautiful right throughout.
I really like your writing style, everything is pure and honest which is a refreshing change.
Keep up the great writing!
--Stardust xx
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Beautiful! The imagery was stunning, and made me imagine the rain falling once again! Thankyou for entering my contest, and Good Luck!
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Wow!!
I'm so Happy to see You writing and spilling Your Heart and Spirit with Love's ink
Beautifully done and the words tug hard and take the reader through a metamorphosis...
through the rain...that You speak of...
Love this!!
Thank You for sharing Your Talent also Voice~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet One
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Thanks my sweet friend
I have missed you greatly
Lots of love, Richard
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I like it
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As in past conversations. This is a gift of shared natural occurence. I kind of feel. It's the peaceful solitude of the rain,that allows deep emotions to surface.It is as you say. A relaxed meditative time ,watching it rain.Great private moments to reflect on thoughts, hopes and wishful things for us all. Although to some. Rain is only a void preventing the sunny pursuit of outdoor adventures also.I don't know. There is just a certain energy a storm generates, that inspires me personally. And from reading this poetic well versed offering, it seems to have a similar effect.
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Thanks suseann,
We rain lovers are a creative bunch
Richard
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