You built me up
You set me free
I had never felt, so much like me
Then things got hard
Yeah it was real ruff
So I packed my bags, and you took all your stuff
I never knew
That along with you
Went me heart, soul, and spirt too
I cried alone
For days and days
All of that now, is a big haze
I forgot about crying
Forgot about you
What day week or month, I have no clue
Thank you though
For putting me through hell
Now I don't have to feel, I am an empty shell
A contest entry
- Quote Prompt - 20 entries by Exodus.
525 points, ended February 1, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Good
Your word choices are clever, descriptive, and imaginative. Your simplest words can carry the most weight when you make the reader feel them and not just hear them. The author uses good imagery and maintains a poetic flow through the whole piece. I enjoyed reading this poem, it rings true and real.
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Under 15 lines (inc)
No religion.
No end line rhyme"
Thank you for writing for my anyway
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