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Disturbed

silently suffering
senses scream solitude,
violent voices viciously,
deliberately,
disturb my melancholy madness.

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[schizophrenia]

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  • tara wilson gold member
    January 29, 2008
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  • Floorboards
    January 29, 2008
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    Yowzers, congratulations on yer golden goose, terrifying stuff,
    well done,
    Floorboards.


  • PerfectImperfection
    January 29, 2008

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    I like the consistency of words; SVDM - gives a sort of flair to the piece... That said, the poem is a great take on the prompt itself. I saw multiple personalities when I looked into it as well. Excellent write!


  • Exodus gold member
    January 29, 2008

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    Wow. I wasn't thinking exactly schizophrenia when I saw this, but something close.
    I think you did a brilliant job of explaining that chaotic feeling, the feeling that they're all you are.
    Potent, but unforced alliteration.
    Thank you