Remembering those days before
I can not live them any more
I look back into my past
And wonder why time went so fast
I wish I could go back to then
And relive those times again
Why does life go by so fast
Why can't moments stay and last
Why do memories fade away
As your life goes by each day
I look into the setting sun
To see another day is done
Where did all the time go
Now how could I ever know
Just one blink of your eye
And then your life will pass you by
Why does life go by so fast
Why can't moments stay and last
Why do memories fade away
As your life goes by each day
- cutters and bleeders group list • next in list
- Anime Lovers group list • next in list
A contest entry
- BLOW (repaired) by Kali-Mus.
600 points, ended March 2, 2008, 5 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
1 - 17 of 17
-
oh wow... you got me with your rhymes. Rhyming is really hard for me but here I think you've pulled it off!
This is a reminiscence of the past and the future to be. An excellent topic which always touches me.
I will now fade away as my life goes by each day... 
Great write.
blessed be
Blanche
-
Amazing...
It's like you just pulled the thoughts straight from my head... This was a very nice write. Great job.
-
This is beautiful. I love the flow and the rhythm of it, and it has a very good message.
-
This is awesome. I have truly enjoyed the creativity. One critique would be to becareful with the way you put caps on the beginning of each line, it can make the lines appear choppy.
Thanks for sharing this
Melanie
-
awsome
I like this -
i like but need more detail
-
I liked it.*stargirl's side writing*
It was nicely written
It question's life well
I luv how you ask the questions in a rhythmn.
I like it keep up the good work.
-
you captured "longing" so very well...
the questions the poems asks really haunt the heart
and memories with good quality imageries!
for 15 you are writing with a good deep soul, fearless
too! Good job dear poet, good job!
many bold adventures await you, can't wait to read
your poems!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen : )))
-
Why read this poem?
well... why not?
its good, i only wish peole will read my poems sometimes...
I know what its like to have life blur by so quickly -
Nice poem, I like how it's message is very clear and precise. . .yet if you sat to think about it the thoughts that come whooshing in your head are endless. It's dark yet very simple and so so pure. Poems like that are special I think.
-
I Like it.
The ryhme scheme isnt my favorite.
I prefer freeverse, but you made it work.
Thanks for entering!!
-
I always love poets who can rhyme and you did an exceptinal job with this poem. I can't rhyme at all. This poem reall touched me I loved it. Keep Writing sweety!
Kelsi
-
I love rhyme and you have done it very very well here! I love what the piece is about also. Yes, life goes by so very very fast! Trust me, I'm over twice your age!! So make sure you just enjoy the moment, and try to make good memories!!
Very much enjoyed reading this!
-
Wow, the rhyming was amazing and I'm not a big rhyming fan, the emotion in this is spectacular. Keep it up.
-
The flow, thanks to the rhyme and rhythm, is really good as well as thought-provoking. This'd make a good song, but it's a great piece of poetry none the less.
-
wow ...i lik this
-
Good
This was pretty good, not really a fan of rhyming poetry but this was a good piece. Thank you.
Adding your comment:
1 - 17 of 17
