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Quell

Gripping dawn by the reigns,

Smashing sunlight raising dark, 

 

A heartbeat is only as good

As the corpse that can no longer feel it,

And your arsenic coated tongue,

Tingles my cheek while you whisper

Sweet sweet symphonies of satire.

 

Fie fiend fie!

Your lies my lips no longer taste.

Author notes

Not sure where i'm going with this, so for now WIP

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  • SmokinHotWhiteTiger
    January 30, 2008
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    Nice One

    To me this seems to be slightly dark but then again its very well penned and I really loved that 2nd line as it really made this poem into quite an imaginative blow to us all. any ways all round excellent muse you have written here and very much enjoyed. keep up the good work bro


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    January 29, 2008

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    I don't think you really need to add to it. The venom is already flowing and quite deadly I might add This is a very strong piece Phil and you did a heck of a great job penning it. Me likes it loads