Blossom
Her name is on my family tree,
a little girl who died at three,
only a daughter, never wife,
so long ago, her futile life.
But futile? let us look again,
this baby girl, this tiny wren.
Her life was one with many trials,
each was soothed with mother's smiles;
her father's joy and sister's pride,
she left a vacuum when she died.
They helped her blossom on her stem,
not futile when we think of them.
A contest entry
- Girl and tree - invited only by Sonja.
1500 points, ended January 31, 2008, 2 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 100 Short Prewrites by Kari.
450 points, ended March 31, 2008, 64 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think.
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This poem clearly radiates the sadness one feels when losing a child. Even though the lifetime seems 'futile' for some, the ones who unfortunately had to go through this know much better.
Very well written!
Leander
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Thank you Leander! I cried buckets over this; even though I have not experienced it, many people do.
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Awwww wowwww this was so so deep
It really says so so very much. Thanks for your entry
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Simply divine ...
in so many meanings of the word ... You touched upon the completedness in Plan and Purpose of our Maker, but in a most gentle and cautious way. As usual, your poetry touched my innermost core.
Thank you for the absolutely delightful work you post!
Love
Myra
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Thank you dear Myra. No one passes out of the world without leaving something different, especially these precious little ones. Smiles through tears.
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Now, this one punch me in the middle. I lost the child, girl of my own too. Deep, deep emotions are along the whole poem, inside each and every word. Sigh...
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Oh Sonja, I'm sorry for your loss, and for bringing up old pain.
Many blessings to you, and thank you for inspiring this poem.
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Beautiful!! Eloquent!
Your grace, skill breathe life into this beautiful tribute thank you for making me think... of the possibilities Brava!
Sorry haven't been around was sick again and taking a while to heal
Love, Peace, Joy, Blessings, Wisdom,
To You & Yours,
~Myst~
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Thank you Myst - I'm sorry you are still unwell.
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