I walk across the ocean,
I walk besides it.
I whispered words
That pinches myself
In such a low murmured
Hymn, I wretched my ears.
I have walked enough with the path
I shouldn’t. I have aligned my hopes
To an empty hollowness
From where none returns.
I am mere a shadow who I used to be once.
Whirling and reeling the films of my past.
A contest entry
- Quote Prompt - 20 entries by Exodus.
525 points, ended February 1, 2008, 17 entries
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Thanks for such a lovely comment.
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I am mere a shadow who I used to be once.
Whirling and reeling the films of my past.
Beautiful expression
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Thanks a lot
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" am mere a shadow who I used to be once.
Whirling and reeling the films of my past."
Liked these lines very much dosto. Great work as usual.
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Really Friday, if you're confused about the tenses I will appreciate it cos I want to show the empty hollowness in the poet by chaotic sentence orders, who mingles the past with the present.
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A melancholy poem, hopes drift but regain their feet, like web and tide of ocean. Very well done in this poem Silvy..Thank you for sharing
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Very much like the prompt, the last line is unique and really stays with you. I got a little confused with tenses in some of the lines but other than that, this was lovely. Thank you
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