dog lapping up snow
by brown of slippery path;
two days run of sun
Author notes
"This is a great form of poetry
that flows from my thoughts,
though the picture I see is greater,
I have summed it all up beautifully in such short verse."
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good luck isn't quotable for long
please give a few syllables not emoticons nor the applause in comment,
though rose is a nice silence left to image
A contest entry
- Haiku by InBetweenThoughts; all welcome by InBetweenThoughts.
600 points, ended February 21, 2008, 30 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
rear of house
Comments
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Thank you for your entry. Vivid images come forth, good form and counts, Ken IBT
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I love the picture but don't like the two /path/
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informed comfortably
Echidna my oops for not seeing your count besides literal number
I was thrown off from recognizing a repeat when you presented integer - slash noun- since each was a word I used so I was leaving it to wonder how to replace those units of speech. but I see you found particular repetition on second line, which made syllables one excessive therefore easy to eliminate back to normal all around!
up to par today?
also called -
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that's clearer, for me. Up to par? I'm on eagle.
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fun once more
Echidna good striking
lol lady with golf eye too
my brain moved the advancing moment to video,
also called
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I'll wonder on it
Echidna could you elaborate
thanks for reading, and disapproving bumps. Was disturbance around pronunciation rhythm, not enough enhancement to meaning or imagery through the detail you found troubling?
I see a combo to be reemphasized,
also called
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