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Insanity's Rainbow

 

Haunted sunken eyes grin,
skeletal sockets, decayed skin.
Amber arrows bathed in mist,
venom spat while death kissed.

Infection riddles every vein,
mind in turmoil, eyes insane.
Musky scent seeps in pores,
scarlet fluid drips on floors.

Jaded heart shatters at night,
shriveled nightmares squirm in fright.
Taught coral strands recoil,
illicit souls simmer and boil.

Minds melt inside time,
silver boundaries cross the line.
Phantoms bath within sound,
splashing in glee, bubbles abound.

Tawny hearts attempt to exist,
draining darkness from the abyss.
As dejected snakes devour,
insanity bridged the gap to power.

Author notes

Option #6
Show me your favourite pre written poem. It can be about absolutely anything, just make sure it shows your talent as a writer.
I think this sums me up quite well...clueless..lol. But it is my fave at the moment.


Prompt; Dark poems. I hope this is ok and isn't to evil for you. I did curb the horror and gruesome imagery. Anyway feel free to DQ if it's not what your looking for.

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Comments

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  • animated lies
    February 19, 2008
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    Really good. Nothing is too dark for me, I was on a dark-writing-spree for a long time. Anywho, nice rhyme scheme. A couple breaks in your rhythm. Like on line 4, I feel like you need "is" between death and kiss. But thats just my opinion. Overall I think its very mysterious and the imagery is very intriguing.

    Thank you for entering my contest.


  • aboomer silver member
    February 10, 2008

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    First, I absolutely love your border!!!!!
    You have the most amazing wording and images in this and it reads so nicely. Some outstanding lines...I especially liked,
    'jaded heart shatters at night
    shriveled nightmares squirm in fright'
    This is amazing! Good luck in your contest!

  • grimreaper-07
    February 5, 2008

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    damn..you got me horney

    thats good...im horney now...how else can i put..true words like that...hope that this wont be the end


  • God is my reality
    February 1, 2008

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    Ok. I love the background. It's hilarious, Now for the poem: Great rhyme scheme, amazing imagery. GOOD GRACIOUSNESS, this is really good. It's dark in it's own way, it's like it's own division of dark poems. Excellent jobs


  • malmadre gold member
    January 31, 2008
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    Lady Dementia you are the queen of mean! no one can pack so much into their words as you.


  • CherryOnTop
    January 30, 2008

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    A very nice dark and evil poem.Not horrific and gory. Good luck in the contest.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    January 30, 2008

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    There were some AWESOME lines in there hun!!

    Infection riddles every vein,
    mind in turmoil, eyes insane.

    Minds melt inside time

    insanity bridged the gap to power.

    Wow.. those are crackers!!!!!!! You have done another dark masterpiece!

    (that penguin does have insane eyes too lol)


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    January 30, 2008

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    man, this is some dark, deep stuff you have penned here my friend, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    January 29, 2008

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    Great stuff!!!

    Love this!!!
    Great descriptive narrative, metaphoric use, flow & rhythm.
    the rhyme scheme is to die for...
    love the line 'Tawny hearts attempt to exist, draining darkness from the abyss.'.
    Well done!!!
    Another great piece you have here...

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