Waves surge violently
in your shores
and wind threatens
to destroy your home,
but
I interceded.
Trust is now futile
if you worry
your safety.
A contest entry
- Looking for Favorites by just-an-amateur.
600 points, ended February 10, 2008, 21 entries
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Comments
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As already said I see the powerful nature that ebbs from this poem. Doesn't it seem so strange that through little pipes we control the water that makes up over 70% of our world? And yet nature has her moments. The last three lines confused me though because I was wondering if you meant to put
"if you worry for
your safey" but just ran out of words since you had already hit 25. Either way though this poem is excellently written. Thanks for entering and best of luck in the contest.
~M~
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I agree with Amera-this is quite powerful and an enjoyable read
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This is short yet very powerful. The first line introduces the rage then the devistation seeps in then you sooth everything with hope and love. Well done!
Love,
Amera♥
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