Dearest darling, sweetheart mine,
will you be my valentine?
Your deep dark eyes..
my, how they shine!
More than mere mortal,
you must be divine!
My every thought
is only of you
I'm so love-sick,
it's worse than the flu!
The only cure
I'm looking for..
a kiss from your lips
which I adore.
You're all I want,
all I'll ever need.
I grew to love you,
you planted the seed.
Like morning glory,
a clinging vine
I'm stuck on you..
you're my sunshine.
You light up my life
with love so true
my heartlight beams,
dear, only for you.
I have no doubt,
it's with you I belong.
You speak, I hear music..
a beautiful song.
A song that only
an angel could hear
for I'm in heaven
whenever you're near.
Your face, your smile,
the sound of your laughter
make me believe in
'happily ever after'.
Maureen Halasovski - January 29, 2008
Author notes
Option One: Someone significant in my life
You don't believe in 'happily ever after'? How unromantic can you be?
I rewrote this poem so it's almost like new!
All it needs is a comment from YOU!
P.S.: I hope you like the video, too!
(The music is "My Valentine" by Martina McBride..my current favorite song.)
Poem was originally written November 16th, 2003, for a "sappy" love poem contest.
Be Happy! Get Sappy!
In a list
A contest entry
- Multi-option Contest by Deus Proteje.
600 points, ended February 1, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - finding love by Hecate616.
350 points, ended March 17, 2008, 143 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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to touch within that song of romance where memories are found and remembered ...
and the joy that continues!
yes yes I remember those days so well days past
Keep penning on one stroke at a time!
Bill
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Wonderful
I enjoyed it and think that it is great. I know for a fact that love can last forever. It has for my wife and me. It seems as if we have been married all our lives, and I know that we will be until one or the other of us passes on to the next life A great poem Maureen!
Damon
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Thank you, Damon!
So nice to hear from you again!
You and I are living proof that love can last forever (with our mates). I feel the same way..it seems as if Mike and I have been married all our lives. I'm glad you liked my poem. Have a great day!
<3 Maureen
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I enjoyed this
it was sweet and poetic, but in some parts the rhymes were a bit juvenile, e.g.
"My every thought
Is only of you
I'm so lovesick
It's worse than the flu!"
Overall, good effort , good write and thanks for putting the option number in as requested.
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this is a very well penned poem and full of rhyme, which normally is not one of my favorites as many times they seemed force, you pulled this off well and i enjoyed the read along with your rhyme! Best of luck in the contest.
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So loving... a lovely piece...
I loved the way the speaker assumes herself as an angel who only could listed to the divine language of her true love. It's fantastic...
My favorite 1:
"You speak, I hear music..
a beautiful song."
My fav 2:
"A song that only
an angel could hear"
Thanks for sharing.. .Good luck in the contest...
Love
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good write poet
"I'm so love-sick,
it's worse than the flu!" (been there)
I like the words used in this poem, very true for a lot of us. Good luck in contest!
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Liked the flow of these lines, the rhythm, rhyme and sentiments you express so well here. Easy to read and understand what you are conveying in these lines. Very fitting for this time of season, with Valentine's Day approaching.
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A very sweet poem, ever so well penned. Good structure and rhyming was good too. Thanks for giving me the opportunity to read it. keep up the good writes and best of luck in the contest that you've entered. xxx
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awww so cute!
I love the poem...it's adorable really!
I hope you get you happily ever after! -
What a sweet Valentine poem! I suppose I will be seeing a whole lot of these during the next few weeks.
This was very romantic and a bit cheesy but we can all do for some cheese once in awhile. Good luck in the contest.
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lol awwww wow this is truely amazing. you are really talented and undoubtedly romantic
hehe
good work
thanx fer entering and good luck
toodles, Danielle
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idk if i believe in happily ever after..i mean it happens with some ppl n it doesnt..i dont think love lasts forever..but yeah you can stop likin someone n like them again..so yeah...love sucks in my honest opinion but this is a good poem with a good rhyme scheme..keep up the good work
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Actually I don't believe in happily ever after. Maybe I am unromantic. But I don't. Good poem here, good luck to you in the contest.
~*Destiny*~
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Maureen~
Oh, I most definitely DO believe in "happily ever after"....no doubt about it! Now, what I do doubt, however, are a couple of the lines in this here poem of yours! LOL! "You light up my life with love so bright, I have to wear shades, even at night".... Now that is pretty darn pathetic, but really the rest of it isn't all that bad....except maybe the flu line! I almost kinda, sorta like it....almost. Thanks so much for entering the contest and good luck to you!
~Janet~
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We've heard from the lover. Now in order to make a decision on the happily ever after part, we would have to hear from the lovee. If the other half of this romantic duo is just as cheesey, then yeah, they'll live happily ever after. Good luck Maureen.
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Maybe I don't, maybe I do. Sure wish I knew though, after I read you!!!
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