YOUR the one
I see when I close my eyes,
YOUR the one
I feel holding me in my dreams,
YOUR the one
I hear telling me it will be alright,
YOUR the one
I cherish with all my heart....
Why cant I let go of you
What is it I hold on to??
I know I deserve more than you give me
Yet I cant move on from you
I don't want to feel this way
I want to be free of my dreams of you
just as you are free from thoughts of me
I don't want to live this lie
and hope one day ~ you will love me, really really love me.
Left with the pain of loneliness
I hold onto the thoughts of you...
As much pain as you bring me,
My dreams of you
give me comfort and hope
Because....
YOUR the one I am with
even if only in my dreams
YOUR the one
I am scared...that I will always love........
Author notes
Well...this piece sucked - but it was written purely because i needed to get things off my chest...Life sucks right now - I am on a downward spiral ~ and there is one person that I can escape away in my head with - and smile...even if in reality, he isn't there!!
Written November 16th, 2003
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Good write. You have only made one mistake; it's a significant one but not one that can't be easily fixed- I think that YOUR THE ONE, is actually an abbreviation of You Are the One. Hnece, 'your' should actually be spelt 'you're'.
Maybe you will surprise me and say this was intentional? Anyway, I could get past that small mistake anyway. Good Write.
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THis poem far from sux...it was written form your heart, and that's what makes it so strong...You have a wonderful write here...I can relate to it other than the fact that I don't want to forget him....that's my pproblem....I want him to be a part of my life....this is truly a great write...str8 fromt he heart...It hink that's how they all should be....Wonderful talent
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guilty
wait...u think this sux??? um sry but...no!! -
guilty
this is really good, this explains my situation completely with my ex times 10 or 11 boyfriend. gr8 write!!!
xoxo
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I can't believe you think this poem sucks. This poem is great. It seems like hard times lead to great poetry, as this obviously proves. I think it's great that you wrote about it though, because poems like this help people realize that there are other poeple going thorugh the same situations. I hope things get better for you.
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This dose not suck.. its great.. and i can relate...keep it up!
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Well the peace pretty good in my opinion. i mean i cant really say it sucked. I am sorry that life is in the dumps for you but hey it will get better with time.
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The first and foremost thing. The word is 'you're', not 'your'. That was the first thing I noticed when I read this piece.
That aside, I loved this piece. I've been in that situation where it's impossible to move on even though you know they aren't right for you. This, for some reason, reminded me of 'My Immortal' by Evanescence, I guess because of the similar themes.
A sad but well expressed piece. -
oh man this is great i can completely relate..great write buddy
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You think that this sucked? Whoa... I would definitely hate to hear what you think of my works then! I really thought that this poem was amazing. I see that you are in a rough spot right now and I'm not sure the advice to give you because there are those people that you probably won't forget in time but time does make the ache less and less as the minutes tick away. Good luck... nicely written. *sonya*
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