We slow danced upon time’s sheeted daze
embraced in corridors others couldn’t see
Wrapped illusion’s realities in other realms
against measures of warm cotton sheets
Entwined we were two bodies, one mind
though it seemed forbidden that we were
Forcing circumstance to guard our heels
against poisoned eyes filling our worlds
Moving in silence, I long to sever the ties
allowing you to venture, freedom’s guide
Understanding we must briefly part ways
but in our secret realm, I shall always wait
Treasured I watch, encircling you in light
creating safe passage along your life
And to those that inhibit my fondest star
vengeance of the Gods is their reward
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very nice...i love it!!!
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Wow! Lovely write! The imagery and flow was there! The last stanza really sealed the deal. I like how there is so much emotion hidden inside. Cool! Love it!! Stellar!! Great job!
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This poem means alot to me. It reminds me of my old Ex Eric and I. Everyone hated us being together because my family is so Christian and his well he was a Necromancer. Needless to say that didn't last long but I know we still love each other. No matter the bad blood between us
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Now that I have read several of your poems, I am beginning to recognize your unique poetic voice and I like it. This poem for instance has a wonderful almost magical spiritual tone to it. Your poetry has a wonderful flavor that reaches deep into the reader’s mind and caresses it.
Love,
Amera
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Ah I got lost in the cotton sheets imagery, I am very tired at the moment though so perhaps that dreamy warmth seduced me
a good poem.
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This is exquisite, Gypsy. A beautifully sensitive piece, sensual and spiritual.
Another grand write
Dee
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well, i thought i had commented on this one... i know i read it, but, oh well... lol
this one is incredible...
this one definately is one of your best!
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forgot these cats..lol
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Brilliant
As I read I had thoughts of a sharing such as this...truly becoming one and complete...and being strong enough to let go
this is timeless
and all who reads
will be rewarded
peace and hugs
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...I was paying some attention to the way this poem was constructed, until about the fifth word
... then I was drawn to just breathe it in, and its, flow like water, the kind from the earth's secret places, the kind for walking upon, words telling of real love ... the kind that makes us gods...
for example, first stanza and last two lines of second:
...these are an allusion to the god, Paris, who was invincible except for a small place on his heel, for his mother, a goddess who shielded his human nature, a child of a mortal and a god, by blessing him, except for that one place, with divine eternal love's protection ... an arrow struck him there when he became careless in battle, an errant, unaimed arrow, like gossip or thoughtless slander or unkind words... it shows a beautiful tender regard, this final two lines, almost achingly beautiful...
and then your final stanza is a banquet of adoration,
... i would love to be someone's fondest star
Bravo. Exquisite!!!
Moqui says
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You do have a great way of words. This poem is outstanding, but of course all of your poems are. I always enjoy.
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gorgeous!
A gorgeous piece! Well delivered, great images throughout! You are so talented and I truly enjoy reading your amazing work!
Blessings and *stomps
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oh Gypsy, this is absolutely beautiful. Such sensuality and a warm love emanates throughout. Truly beautiful.
Ann
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You are still such an amazing writer after all this time. I think you've been on my favorites since I first got on AP. Great write, once again.
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WOW
this poem took my breath away with it pure bueaty. I did think that you could get any better but you do. i enjoy this poem so very much thank you . Hope you will have a great day
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This piece speaks softly of loving adorations and a warm fuzzy feeling of contentment.Has good meter and is a smooth read.Sending vibes of light to surround one loved is a beautiful thought.Hey now! Congrats on the book going to published too. I'm sure it will do very well.
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Excellent
Awwwh, such powerful words, flowing through the mind with light.
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Oh this is just wonderful dear. For those who have felt this with all the sensuality of mind and spirit know those ties that bind one's Life Energies to another's.
Brilliant!
Marianne
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