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Between faces and spaces--
I walk without a name,
no sound in the cradle
of night and day,
only tears.
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Written January 28, 2008
20 words
A contest entry
- Empty- 20 words-PIF by Cannonsfire.
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This is a very short poem, but definately gives enough food to the reader to ponder upon the words.
You have managed to create a huge impact with few words. Well done!
Thanks for the entry - I wish you all the best!
Leander -
Dang, this is hard core, it leaves me with such a hollow feeling. I want to take hold and hug you like a child and tell you it will be alright. Great write.
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So few are your words yet still they make an impact on the reader. I found myself lost in this piece that I read it thrice over. Thank you for entering. Best of luck to you!
Blessings
Bel
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How do you write like this? So much said in so little words. Astig ka talaga Pare!
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This builds magnificent layers upon the theme.
Excellent and compelling imprints left after
the read. Blue
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No words, only tears here
Love, C
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now that is emptiness...
excellent metaphor..
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