Radiant
in her pain...
pale moonglow
softens edges while
pros
'n
cons
race.
Synapes snarl
swirling
indecision.
Angels watch...
expectant.
Alert to her
longing
following
as eyes sweep
luminous up
towering brick building.
Author notes
hoodoolover
I picked Round Here, Counting Crows, and I couldn't help but combine both lyrics into one poem, just seem so natural
1. In between the moon and you, angels get a better view of the crumbling difference between wrong and right.
2. She looks up at the building, says she's thinking of jumping. She says she's tired of life. She must be tired of something.
A contest entry
- Double the Lyrics by Morrigan Trinity.
525 points, ended January 31, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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the flow is good and you are correct they do intertwine welll . I wasnt sure what this contest was trying to achieve, but wht you have come out with is very nicly scripted. curious contest for some intriging poems.
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Lovely. I like how you combined the two poems. I should have added that as an option.
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Thank you, this song is one of my alltime favs as well
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Excellent use of prompts, I love what you did, brilliant.
I didn't even need the comment to get the references
just, very well done.
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