I remember your face.
My eyes lost in your smile.
The emotions etched on your features
graze the boundaries of my memory.
The fresh pain of it tastes salty, running down my face.
I wipe away the sodden memories in hopes it will rid me of you.
Alas, you linger;
taunting me with your silver tongue and fixed peer.
Such a glorious sensation, to be forgotten.
No longer the object of any – even the most casual – affection.
Freedom in existence with no sorrow engraved in my countenance.
A per during scar, erased from my eyes at the absence of your memory.
Author notes
I know, it's rough and is lacking; however, I felt like.... I just had to write something. My mind is getting lazy and I am having trouble focusing, which is kind of the point of the piece, I suppose. Go ahead, reprimand me for my pedestrian writing.
Now that I reread this, I am finding that I hate it... truly.
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to be buried and forgotten seems to be the saddest thing to me. if i leave absolutely no impact on one single person in the universe then my life truly was not worth the living and i took up valuable space. you brought that point home with this write. thank you for sharing this with me today. viyanna rosemarie
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This is good. Hurts do give us scars but they only stay if we let them. The best way to write, is write what you feel. There is no wrong way to write--Just write!!
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hey i kno u dont kno me...but im angels of light and i think this poem is really good..u are a good writer and maybe we can chat through our poems..well it was nice to read ur poem...oh it is a good write for a poem..
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it seems good to me! i love how you described the ways you tried to rid yourself of the bad memories left to hurt you.
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Good write
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Sometimes we do just have to write whats on our minds or how we are feeling..I don't think its rough or lacking at all.. you've done very well here.
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To be forgotten? Or to forget? There is a difference between the two, though we fail realize it sometimes. The last line second word confuses me, but overall it is a fair poem.
until immolation,
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it's an ok poem...good idea to change the font of the poem....it's really hard to read
KEEP WRITING
Midnight Rose14
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No...I love it's edgy,bittersweet tone...don't vhange a thing...
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Beautifully writter, rather bitter--but it happens. I don't know why it is you hate it, obviously you see something in it that I don't. I wouldn't change a thing. I love every line, I can't chose one it's nearly impossible. Don't stop writting!!!
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