Let me take some solid measures
Let me open all my treasures
Let me moan and let me groan
Let me sing in a sinful tone
Be it...if I may be cursed
ENTER...let my bud be burst.
A contest entry
- Shall You... Blossom? by LadyLavender.
575 points, ended January 31, 2008, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Very solid writing. Just the right amount of emotion to mix with the touch and the result is pure pleasure. Keep the ink flowing.
~Donna~
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to the point!
Loved it! loved the honesty intermingled with lush emotions. especially the line
'be it- if i may be cursed,
Enter... let my bud be burst,
you kept the feminity of it too- which sometimes people can loose with to much erotica
keep writing!!!
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Let me moan and let me groan
Let me sing in a sinful tone
My favorite lines, you're singing this poem so well.
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A Maximum of Sensuality in a minimum of words!
HOT!!!!
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BuriedTreasure
I love to have maximum pleasure in a minimum time....
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Well done
Nice rhyme, right reason????????????
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DeGraw
Provide me another reason, hottie, for some more rhyme....
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Wow, short and sweet. Another amazing erotic write. you do it in such a way that its more then just erotic it actually has a way about it that isn't cheesy.
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I like the rhyme!!! Nicely done!
Short and sweet!
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http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zlrXnIz4uHY&feature=related
go thaer and you well see what i wont to do -
hott. I love the line 'let me sing in a sinful tone'.
you come up with the greatest little things.
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I love the next two lines in this:
"Let me moan and let me groan.
Let me sing in a sinful tone."
But I cant help but wonder, how about a sexxy/sinful tone?
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aww sweet
love the poem
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...and I love sexy princesses!
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too sweet
i enjoyed this little piece....no pun intended
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I enjoyed it, too...pun INTENDED...lol
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What an invitation. I love it. I look forward to more.
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You look forward to receiving more such invitations?...You're naughty, babe! Real naughty.
Galaxy2 -
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Haha. I guess that comment sounded more forward than I intended when I wrote it.
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Budding
Nice to read your poem. Let me tell you I really like those opening two lines. It makes me wonder what you actually mean by solid measures. I have an idea of what it could mean, but I'm not sure I should tell you.
Thank you for writing this poem.
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Had you been a girl, I would have asked you about your 'idea'. Since you're a boy, I don't want you to tell me; I already know what you mean...lol
Thanks a lot for the comment.
Galaxy2
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Interesting!
I really like how this reflects a brave stance... a decisiveness on your part... come what may (no regrets kinda feeling... but careful with your heart doll coz I dunno but mine was just a tad too soft despite intentions otherwise)
<3 TC... Alex
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I thank you for your lovely comment...
You and your heart are indeed very beautiful!
Kisses, sweet girl!
Galaxy2
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Love your freedom
I miss the freedom of self expression and youth. I envy you for what I had once. Keep developing your voice. Let it mature with a streak of wildness
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Hark!....
Did you hear something, love!
It was the voice of a bud bursting...lol
Galaxy2
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oohhh....I got shivers!! I love it!
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I'd love to see you shivering...cutie!
thanks!
Galaxy2
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Outkumm
A reasure I found...solidly my measurements agree with your moaning sounds...ENTERING you as your bud burst...you giving me your all kumming first!
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You're naughty...gentleman!
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Naughty
you cause those thoughts
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Seems I have to improve my language skills of comrehension...I got...but a little...
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no need to upgrade your comprehension I write & talk from 6 individual points at once!
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I agree with BiSexuality...would have loved to see more on this write.
Good luck and thankyou for entering. -
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I need to be inspired by some cutie to be more erotic...you know what I mean, cutie!
Galaxy2
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I love this, so simple yet so erotic and I love the rhyme. Best of luck!
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It could be more erotic...if I could see you standing in front of me, honey, while writing it...lol
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Very good.
Short but most definitely to the point. I love the first two lines the most! You should consider writing a longer poem starting with those two lines. They are strong and powerful.
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I prefer shorter pieces...I'd like it longer though if it is a practical activity...lol
Galaxy2
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So short and right to the point, love it when you write like this, as I said before it leaves a lot to be seen within the mind, and I do love to use my imigination....
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Oh my..
Your pretty eyes are so piercing...
I'm afraid you must have seen lots of erotic fantasies...
Galaxy2
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Ooooo... sweet and sexy!
I love lil hot poems like this sweets!
(you can just go in and edit that line hunny if you want)
You're the cutest!
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Sweet girl...sweet comment...That's you, sweetie!
Thanks!
Galaxy2
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This one has left me speechless. You are an excellent writer. I loved it just loved it. Keep it up!!!!!
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The last line runs like this
But let my bud be burst
Please read 'BURST' for 'bursed'.
Galaxy2
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