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Quiet are my sighs upon a sleepy eyed world
revealed in circles, of frosty halos
flickering images under porch light; stir
imagination dances nude cross ghostly lawns
How extraordinary, I ponder, are my sleepless nights
when dust bunnies take on mystic form
pirouetting cross floors, in puffs-of-flutters
winded by fairies' songs---of wonder
Shall I ignore their fanciful tunes
leave their quips--- un-done----un-heard
turn my back on shadows where monsters lurk
haphazardly playing peek-a-boo in my words
Dare I miss the magic of Moon's spun tales
Lay down on Morn's pillow of regret
Take a brief hiatus from Enchantment's hours
when creativity shifts in to over--drive
Or..
Shall I...
Let Night's candle burn at both ends
while slaying dragons with my pen......
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Author notes
Razzberry--
I've always had a problem falling asleep at night mainly because when I try to drift off the creative part of my mind kicks in and I want to stay up and write. The poem is about my writings in quiet hours of night when imagination can run wild.
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2. The twilight
Comments
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No.
Sorry, but this didn't really spark anything from me. Your imagery is well done and your word choice was good, but I felt that this could hold more emotions. Also, I'd suggest a background change as well. Good write though.
Josh
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no, sorry.
this is really good, just not what i personally prefer. however if the last judge says yes, you will still make it to round one. -
yes.
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Im giving this a yes.
But. Please, Id advise you to change your font and/or background into something that can be read. -
This is so beautiful. Just amazing. Your use of imagery is one of the best I have seen. This is a piece that you truly should be proud of. Great work here, thank you so much for sharing it and entering it in my contest. The best of luck to you.
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I loved this line: "imagination dances nude cross ghostly lawns", very fun to read out loud! Good luck, thanks for entering!
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I can barely read this...
Author's name in author's notes. And explaination of poem. (As I asked for.)
Amazing write... Once I got passed the colors. Anyway, I loved the wording and imagery here. This is perfectly penned. Thanks for entering. -
This is such a beautiful and enchanting piece of work, the imagery and description are both perfect to set the scene. Well done and good luck with this gorgeous entry. Simply beautiful!
Shaz xx
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Written with wit and grace. Though, you danced around the theme and I got only a very loose sense of twilight when I read this. One thing- In the first line 'quite' should be 'quiet' I assume. Other than that, you did well with word choice and imagery. I thought the poem was very vivid and was quite ingenious for a new poem. I'm giving people who enter new poems a few extra points in my judging for their effort. So kudos, this is a job well done. Also, capitalization of moon, morn, and night is a really good emphasis to the poem's content. I liked that about this poem. Cheers and good luck.
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