Cavalier, wild and reckless I once roamed carefree,
toasted the toss of boiling black sea;
longed for speck ship on horizon's edge,
lived for free-fall from high window ledge.
Impetuous and random, I whirled on a whim,
preferred to taste drowning than learning to swim;
howled with rapture as I tore off my reins,
slid in the lust that coursed through my veins.
Then struck by the flicker of flowers' fading truth,
abandoned vain search for ephemeral youth;
my body bequeathed but my heart was ungiven,
learned how to feel, to be loved and forgiven.
With love irresistible - the sweep of desert storm,
wild urges were stilled with loyalty the norm.
While tender moist mouths wander, each to each,
love seeks not itself but has found outward reach.
No natural wonder, no compelling sweet dream,
can match her sleek body, her beauty supreme,
no speck on horizon, no stormy sea squall,
may lure or distract me from inner free-fall.
While around me in autumn love's claims can be seen,
my tree of true-love remains evergreen.
A contest entry
- Old Fashioned Love by Dorcha Runda.
300 points, ended February 6, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Seasonal Love. by Poetryintheblood.
525 points, ended March 1, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - #52 Turning bronze to gold by daviscth.
300 points, ended March 5, 46 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love Poems by LissaRox.
550 points, ended March 18, 47 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The love of your life... by jbbrandi.
750 points, ended March 24, 24 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Beautiful...Your versatility is amazing..
You seem to be flawless in rhyme as well as free verse...
Bravo..
Lynda
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woooooow
this so sweeeeeeeeeeeeeet and i loved it! breathtaking
i lived each word as I read beautiful!
here is a
for such touching poem
juliet
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Great poem
Spectacular imagery, rhyme, rhythm, flow and sentiments. I really enjoyed reading this, and identify with so many of the concepts expressed - apart from the final three stanzas, but your poem allows me to live on in hope! Thank you for this, I clicked on because of your name, a favourite author. And I was not disappointed. -
This was extremely good. I love it, in fact. But, forgive me...I'm tired and can't write much more about it. But you did an awesome job. Good luck in the contest, and thanks for entering!
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This border compliments your words perfectally.
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Thank you for your beautifully expressed entry and following the rules, good luck, Josie
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wow
your rhyme is amazing..perfect flow..what an awesome love poem..thanx so much for sharing..can see why it was in the spotlight..blessings..
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Awww, this is really sweet. I guess February brings out ll the love poems.
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Okay...This sooo should've won. I read the other poems and yours out shown them all (course I'm biased haha)
Well...Still a great poem and I hope you get more poems in the spotlight and you write more...that can go in the spotlight. Isn't random babbling lovely
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the ending was worth an applause good one. Hey you should comment on one of my featured poems sometime. I have a few of my favorites listed on my author page. I'd really like to know what you think.
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Amazing.
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Beautiful, amazing, brilliant. I bloody love it! Thanks for your entry and good luck to you.
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Beautiful
so much emotion in it.
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wow, u rhyme and flow out your poems so well, an amazing poem
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Quite beautiful
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Very well written. I loved the third stanza. The only thing is that you should change "coarsed" to "coursed."
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Very very well written poem!
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Classic and I do not find flaw here. It is a gorgeous piece and very well written. The imagery is just outstanding. Bravo
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classical music
Its a composition that needs an orchestra. The director has the visualization. I wait for the symphony to start and the music to flow through me. Your language, structure and flow inspire me. Lines 18-21 are (fill in the blank). You got it -
Yes mate, spotlighted again! (Me this time
) Still a great write, 123 applause! Wow, impressive and fully deserving. Take care! x
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I love the images you created. I especially like the thrid stanza. Congratulations on a lovely write.
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haha - this is in spotlight again! thanks to george ^^
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Stunning. Such beautiful words that create a beautiful image. Excellent flow throughout. Brilliant.
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this is lovely, congrats on the front page nomination. Lovely wording used.
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This is just beautiful...liked...preferred to taste drowning than learnto swim;
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holy shit
that poem is GOD! put it in a book NOW lol
i really love this poem, and especially this line...
"while tender moist mouths wander, each to each,
love seeks not itself but has found outward reach."
so true so good. love every bit of this poem
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very nice
very nice write on love and growing . . great nature reference . . liked "howled with rapture as I tore off my reins" and "love seeks not itself but has found outward reach" . . great choice for a favorite !
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Wow. Your word choices are amazing, tumbling off the tongue in a waterfall well-written stanzas.
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Beautiful, beautiful flow, beautiful words beautiful point.
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Excelent
this was such a grand poem, I love every word of it. i thank you so very much for shareing it. I do hope that you will have a great night. it is always so nice to read poems that come from someone with such a grand gift with writting -
This was remarkable!!!! The opening few images were absolutely stunning. We could both picture and FEEL the vivacity and life! And I love how you spoke of the maturing. At first I thought it was going to be sad, but then you introduced TRUE LOVE and brought the reader hope. The rhyme here was absolutely impeccable. I at least was four stanzas down before I even realized it rhymed. Up to that point, I was just thinking, "this is really beautiful language."(I think I first noticed at the each/reach rhyme, which seemd a bit less natural than all the others).
You have written of faithful love with such beauty and craftsmanship. Really wonderful poetry. It's been a while since I read such truly spectacular rhyme in such a wonderful poem!!!
. Rewarded 8
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so lovely, i only wish someone would write so beautifully about me :
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Eloquent!
You have a powerful gift for expression.
The intensity aswell as the style of
your writing is quite excellent.
I'm sure you'll make a fine poet/writer
some day. You should definately pursue
this as a future goal. Don't waste that
talent my friend. Great work here
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Fascinating!
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Really liked this poem. It caught my attention right away
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Utterly beautiful. A great choice of words to paint such a loving picture. Full of hope, excellent rhyming scheme.
Great poem.
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amazing.
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this is amazing. it's so... i can't find the words to describe it. your so talented
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WOW!!!!
this piece is incredible!
i really enjoyed this stanza, it spoke to me in ways i can't describe...
With love irresistible - the sweep of desert storm,
wild urges were stilled and loyalty the norm;
while tender moist mouths wander, each to each,
love seeks not itself but has found outward reach.
once again, incredible!!!
keep on writing!
mike, aka jonathan wikkins
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loved it
classical, romantic, liked the style and flow. Wished I had that use of language
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wow thats an incredible poem thoroughly deserves spotlight status i really wish i could write like you you are clearly truly gifted keep writing
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This is a very beautiful piece - thank you for sharing
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Very nice and well written. My favorite part was the last line: "my tree of true-love remains evergreen" It caught my attention.
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A-M-A-Z-I-N-G!
Finally!! A REAL love poem using more that four letter words and nursery rhymes! This was fantatic! Truly! I don't say that often!
Well written my friend!!
Monique
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Congratz!
Love, this poem is on front page
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A very great poem.these lines are so striking!!
"No natural wonder, no compelling sweet dream,
can match her sleek body, her beauty supreme,
no speck on horizon, no stormy sea squall,
may lure or distract me from inner free-fall."
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your rhymeing reminded me of poe. which is amazing. your word choice in this peice is beautiful. and the imagery is astounding. by far the best poem i've read all day.
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Reminds of the poems of old...gorgeus flow, and the word choice? Impeccable...it made me savitate, they were like a gorment meal...fantastic, for once, I can change nothing, really...
Like a rich piece of fudge...perfect, full of intelligence and beauty...
~Hippie(luv the title!)
. Rewarded 6
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This is a very interesting poem. The first time I read through it my first feeling was that the language was a little overwhelming. Though after I let it sit with me a moment and read it over again the emotion of the poem set in. I would suggest to anyone reading this poem that they do so slowly and endulge in the sound of each word. Very rich poem, I hope you enjoyed writing it.
. Rewarded 8
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Good poem
I liked the way it is meant and the rhythm and rhyme!very good write!Lisa k Haslett Raytown Missouri!
. Rewarded 4
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Awesome descriptions of falling in love and everything that goes along with it!
This poem was a pleasure to read, so beautiful and well written in all it's imagery and depth.
I loved the lines
"my body bequeathed but my heart was ungiven,
learned how to feel, to be loved and forgiven."
I think that line sums up falling in love quite well and beautifully at that.
One of the most beautiful poems I've had the pleasure to read on this site!
. Rewarded 8
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Read this before in the reading list in one of the groups. Sorry - did not remember the title. Do remember the great presentation though.
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This is just beautiful, I love it from beginning to end. not much more that I could possible say, just an excellent write!
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Great poem... full of details of love as it grows...
"Then struck by the flicker of flowers' fading truth,
abandoned vain search for ephemeral youth;
my body bequeathed but my heart was ungiven,
learned how to feel, to be loved and forgiven."
These words speak volumes to the love that two share... really enjoyed your poem, keep writing, I look forward to reading more of your work. De -
Wow...this was just...fantastic! Really amazingly written, beautiful, sparkling and more poetic than almost anything I have ever read! Honestly, this has the feel of the real deal. I do not know what to say...the rhyme and flow and wording and vocabulary and everything is just mind blowing. Each line is perfect and you can't possibly expect me to be able to pick out a favourite!
I hope to one day be able to write something even 1/2 as good as this poem. Best thing I've read in a long time. Take care! x
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Wow. I really liked this one, you used your words well throughout it. Though there were a few awkward lines, they were subtle.
Amazing rhyming, and rhythm! It just flowed so naturally with the rhyme. I expecially liked:
"abandoned vain search for ephemeral youth;
my body bequeathed but my heart was ungiven,
learned how to feel, to be loved and forgiven."
Very nice ~
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loved it so much.. iliked evry word in it. the ending too is so talented.you're very talented. and an elegant man with elegant words. love you for that. and so much other things
. Rewarded 4
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Beautifully well written, and filled with love, which i absolutly adore. great use of words. nicely done.
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Love is a wonderful thing, and you have written a beautiful piece to go with it. Great images emerged while reading your words..soft and tender thoughts,thanks for sharing
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I mean no offense, but I really didn't like this at all. I don't feel that you can mix pedantic, mundane words and poetic, patrician verse and have anything cohesive and profound. - oce
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What a wonderful write. Your rhyming was just amazing, and I loved that it wasn't pedestrian. The imagery replayed in my head quite vividly. I loved the ending, nice work.
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I like your consistency with rhyme, though a couple of places were a bit weak. Comparing the sea to a beautiful woman is very intriguing.
Then struck by the flicker of flowers' fading truth,
abandoned vain search for ephemeral youth;
my body bequeathed but my heart was ungiven,
learned how to feel, to be loved and forgiven.Very nice stanza here. You paint a picture for the mind to look at.
Wolfie
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nothing really to say that hasnt already been said.
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First of all, I absolutely love the layout here, it's gorgeous! Then, I love the poem. The way you write just drew me in. The flow was perfect, and your word choice was exquisite. Actually, I love the topic and the way you presented it, it's not rude or too blunt but quaint and sweet. Thank you for sharing. I really loved the end line.
. Rewarded 6
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well to tell you the truth I loove long poems and i
love that you use vocabulary words, I don't use them.
sounds kind of crazy not to but that is just me oh by the way, keep up the good work
. Rewarded 4
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This was a masterfully written piece full of the emotion and passion a poem in this genre needs. I enjoyed every line and loved the language you used
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One of My Favorites
This is one of my favorite love poems. Such a beautifully written poem that has such a great flow to it. I love the story of maturing love it presents by starting with a vivid description of youthful lustful exuberance and finishes with lines like "love seeks not itself but has found outward reach". This was entirely enjoyable to read.
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wow, i love the story you tell. your rhyming is impeccable, and flows wonderfully. great write
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this was such a grand poeem that you have pened here I truly enjoyed it very much I thank you for shareing it . i do hope that you will have a grand day
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Nice, really really nice..Im not usually one for flashy borders...but this one fit well..eye catching..
The poem itself is a beautiful story..my favorite line;
preferred to taste drowning than learning to swim
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love seeks not itself but has found outward reach.
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I don't usually like rhyme, but I'm glad I clicked on your poem!
"Prefered to taste drowning than learning to swim"
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I think you're in love
The back and forth, give and take, coming and going feeling of this is bewitching. Ok, it gets a little too high browed at times, but this is a romance poem, so I'm sure the object of your affection will swoon...and what more do you want? I think it will charm the pants off almost anybody. I like the "inner free fall" line. The evergreen ending is a little "Babs"...maybe not quite the right ending for the more paradoxical setup in each of the other stanzas. I guess this is a couplet, but in my opinion it is the weakest part of the poem. Nice work! Visit my music at www.nakedadam.net -
preferred to taste drowning than learning to swim;
howled with rapture as I tore off my reins,
slid in the lust that coarsed through my veins.
while tender moist mouths wander, each to each,
love seeks not itself but has found outward reach.
No natural wonder, no compelling sweet dream,
can match her sleek body, her beauty supreme,
wowwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww lovely strong impressive lovelyyyyy dear this's great just as z poet is
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The first half absolutely captured the nature of the young and I love how love cooled the lustful nature of said youth. That was beautifully put. Having said that, I think the last two lines really spoke volumes. Maybe I'm reading it backwards or what have you but it seems that no matter how much life one can experience, the nature and feeling of love will forever baffle. The rhyming was lovely and perfect. Like everyone has said, your metaphors are as brilliant as they are beautiful and haunting. As always, a pleasure to read your work. Never stop
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Oh my! How lovely this piece is. From the flow to the imagery to the absolute beauty in the concept of it. I am breathless.......
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Such vivid and moving expression in your prose, you have a beautiful, a gift really. Your metaphor is a class above, I'm enchanted as I read your verse...thank you!! Have you published any of your work, or tried to go professional??/
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This is a great poem.
Love the background.
What was the reason you wrote this poem.
What did you feel at the time of writing the poem.
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wow
never really looked at it this way but all i can say is WOW!
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Good
A very lovely melodic quality to the piece,
Uriah
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breathtaking! I enjoyed every line.
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wayne! lol. this isn't my poem, it's well a friends poem..lol
love you too wayne!
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