This goddess's name is Paula
Immortal she was.
Her mother warned her
Against the gods from above.
She must not do anything wrong,
She must do exactly as she's told
She must not wither, but stay strong.
One day she went to the market
It was a date with fate.
For she met a guy
She thought was great.
The only problem was he was human
Who would have thought.
Mortals and immortals
Not a good start.
She liked this mortal
And had an affair.
She didn't listen
For it wasn't fair.
This came to fall is Zeus's ears,
He said it was unacceptable
Just as Paula had feared.
Zeus warned he would put a curse upon her
Yes, that's what he would do.
If she refused to leave this mortal
He would make her one too.
Paula thought it over
Yes, there was much to lose.
But she loved this mortal
She was so confused.
Zeus looked down on earth
Paula and the mortal he saw.
He was full of anger
Paula to his palace he called.
Paula came before him
A mortal she became.
Many years later she died
Her decision not a regret.
Author notes
This poem was written for my recent Art 1 final. I had to make a fantasy portrait in oil pastels and come up with a poem to go along with it. My portrait was on a Latin goddess Paula, i got this idea from my Latin 1 class that i am currently taking. So now i want to redue this poem a little bit, but am looking for some advice on what to do and what parts i should fix...any opinions ect...will be very appreciated.
Please tell me what you think
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I like this poem as is, though I haven't read the story. Wonderfully written and very heartfelt. There was plenty of emotions throughout this piece. Great write. Loved it. ~mandie~
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I haven't heard the story about Paula and the mortal man!
And I don't know what should you fix in this poem. I like it as it is
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poetry is very much like oil painting
you will do wonderful with it...
take your poem..and lighten it here and there with
shadows of dark and light.
To give it a flow worthy of a goddess.
Right now it's very black and white, add some color
blend it with air and imagery lightly. touches here and
there! sweep with your words create a goddess atmosphere.
ears2hearyou/Kathleen : )))
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Nicely done
Beautifully written and very heartfelt...I have never read anything by you before and what a pleasant first poem to read! And by the way...my name is Paula! I just couldn't resist the read!
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Good poem. Never heard that story before.
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