red sand flows downhill
paused to contemplate its course
sagebrush holds the line
Author notes
"This is a great form of poetry
that flows from my thoughts,
though the picture I see is greater,
I have summed it all up beautifully in such short verse."
A contest entry
- Haiku by InBetweenThoughts; all welcome by InBetweenThoughts.
600 points, ended February 21, 2008, 30 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Beautiful imagery, as if I were standing beside you. Good form and syllable counts. Thank you for your entry, Ken IBT
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Well Done
I really love it when a poet who writes Haiku's really over details this and yet really makes this an extremely powerful write. I just really love that awesome depth and imagery you built into this poem it is amazing how so few of words can turn into such a deep well penned haiku like this one that has it all within reason. Excellent work and keep up the gold work and good luck
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this is so descriptive, you chose words
that really paint a picture, and can be
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This is beautiful, very nice imagery :)
I really enjoyed this :)
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Wow, beautiful imagery in this!
Good luck to you and thanks for
sharing it here!
Jeremy0826 -
Great haiku!
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