in total abandon, I lay in
tall grass . .
high on the mountain an eye could
never see . .
my love and I take hidden fruits
wrapped in the essence of
wildflower . .
my heart beats in steady rhythm
I can't suppress the fear of
discovery . .
Author notes
Free Verse
Option 4
A contest entry
- "My greatest hopes and fears are centered around you." by Perfectly Imperfect.
450 points, ended February 20, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I love days like this.
This makes me see in my minds eye on a mountain lying in a huge field of flowers in summer... beautiful. *sigh* I wish Winter were over with.
Great write!
~Sarah
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A lovely piece of writing, well done and thank you for entering
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i love freeverse
and the style and structure of the poem pulls the reader in straight away. more!!!
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Now this is great. Subtly and classy. I love the hidden and forbidden it holds. Very sultry. You did such an excellent job. I hpo you do well in the contest.
Kelli
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ahhhh, now this is nice. Beautifully written. Love, Lane
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Love it!
Succinct, well written, and powerful. Best of luck in the contest.
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