Behind the curls
and golden locks
behind the curtain there;
is where I place
the secret things
I would not dare to share.
Behind my heart
where no one goes
behind where feelings lie;
is where I lock
them all in place
so that I will not cry.
Behind the softness
of my cheek
behind my silk-lined skin;
is where the pain
lies most of all -
where broken hearts begin.
Behind the tautness
of my smile
behind the imaged laugh;
is where life's brand
has lived and learned
to cut me straight in half.
Behind the lies
in what's been said
behind my heaving breast;
is where the sorrow
of love gone wrong
has built its feathered nest.
A contest entry
- EMOTION SECRETS by R S Adams Jr.
1100 points, ended February 19, 2008, 19 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Dear Pamela, this is well deserved trophy and I am honored that I was in the same run with you. A really nice and touching poem. I found some incredible nice pictures used in it.
~Sonja~
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~Sonja~
Thank you so much. I appreciate your taking a moment to read and to leave your comments. ~Pamela
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I understand all to well sweet lady of the golden pen.
A well deserved trophy to hang upon the walls of your heart.
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Keith
My friend. Thank you.
You are always kind with your words and I value your friendship so much. Best of luck in your endeavors my dear. 
~Pamela
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Dear Pamela, Congrats. on SILVER!
Tercets rhyming in pairs as couplets is the structured free verse of your excellent poem. I think this poem to be of exceptionally high standard. Sound, movement and carefully timed repetition send waves of emotional shivers down my spine at the tender poignancy of the verses. Five significant poetic sentences are trumps, for this reader.
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Ron
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wonderful, beautiful
This poem is so artistically created, with a rounding off of meaning in each stanza and a repetition, which is almost musical.
It has wonderful punctuation which is appreciated.
I feel the emotion and when I read it aloud, it stirs me with its feelings as well as with its magic sound.
Richard
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Richard
Thank you so much for your wonderful comment and the true honor of silver in your contest. I am thrilled and deeply touched. Thank you so much. I am so pleased you enjoyed this and thank you so much for you earlier assist as well. Thank you. ~Pamela
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OMG!!!!!!!!!!
this ia so amazing and heartfelt...i loved it. the emotion just touches my soul...good luck in the contest...i hope you win.
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babbydoll829
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One word
SUPERB
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ScarletO
Thank you. ~Pamela
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WOW!!!! Amazing! The rhyming scheme in this was SUPERB! And the words were so powerful. I loved the fact that you have discribed so many of us, how we keep feelings locked inside only to fester, and the line "has built it's feathered nest" is such a descriptive and poetic way of describing the heartbreak we keep inside.
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William Vercelli
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Tender verse, gentle verse
and passionate poetics. This is a distinguished poem, Pamela. Form, rhyme and progression are beautifully modulated. Figurative language rises naturally to evoke a singular feeling we all, if we are truly human, can readily identify with.
Someone used the word "eloquence" and with that I would agree.
I wish I had authored this one!
Ron.
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Ron
Thank you so much. ~Pamela
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Oh WOW Miss Pamela! How this sings such a sad, emotional song. It is that place where we keep all of our broken dreams, all of the hurt from unfulled love and secrets that we dare not share with anyone.
I bet that everyone that reads this beautiful piece will have such a personal connection with it as I have just experienced myself.
As always your rhythm is flawless and the rhyme is perfect thoughout the piece.
Such a beauty, my friend~
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My friend, these words from you are gold in my heart. Thank you so much. ~Pamela
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It seems to me that your words are becoming even more eloquent, Pamela. Without falling into cliche, you took an ancient topic and wove it into an evocative poem. Nicely done!
peace
doug
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Doug
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This is quite an emotive and personal piece. You have conveyed so much emotion in this poem. Excellent work. I will have to check you out.
A pleasure. - Wil -
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Wil
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Well-written, and strikes home on so many levels. Living through 'the sorrow of love gone wrong' is what leads to love done right. Believe it. As everyone has mentioned, this flows so beautifully. Thanks.
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IT Refuge
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excellent
Brush those curls aside and let someone else in. Sounds like you've already had your share of crying. So for me to say "let it all out" may be redundant. But a good cry sure drains the lost illusions of love. Each time it gets better. Then you say to yourself , 'what am i crying about?' That's recovery. Then you can be happy with who you are. Alone. Strong."I do what I want" very personal poem
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icebear
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well done
Flows very well. The piece rings very true to those of us who bury our pain inside and hide. The sadness of this piece is deeply felt.
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melphleg
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Such flow!
I am so impressed! This is so well done. Its message is clear, yet artful. I'm curious as to whether this just flowed out of you or if it represents a great deal of effort.
Good luck in the contest!
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Jecks
Thank you for your most kind words. I appreciate them so much. This one just flowed followed by some tweaks.
Always have to tweak. Thank you so much my friend. I am so pleased for your comment here. ~Pamela
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Excellent about how we hide ourselves to conform to society. This piece flows very nicely - best of luck in the contest
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MysticalRayne
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We all put up masks to hide how we really feel because we think no one cares and we don't want others to see how unhappy we are. At least, that is what I got out of the poem.
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Lady Altheia
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I have been there. This poem spoke exactly how I feel. This is a wonderful piece. Keep up the good work
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ShaCarl
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I'm there, and you spoke about me.It truly sucks to be in this position.
Your poem is so full of emotion, especially nw that i do identify with it.
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CausticWitch
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Awesome work here!
I think you did a great job putting
this one together. Great flow, imagery,
and emotions in this. Well done and
thanks a lot for sharing it here! All
the best to you in this contest and keep
up the wonderful work here!
Poet4You
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Poetry4You
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Very well written. I like the flow and how softly you have place the sorrow in this.
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Burtan
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I love the pic, your beautiful words and the form you used here. I am very partial to rhyme and do it very well.
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InkstarRN
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Nice to see this in the spotlight where it belongs.
Lovely.
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Mark
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Wow I wish I could write this good.
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TwentyTemplars
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Haunting
"Behind the tautness
of my smile
behind the imaged laugh;
is where life's brand
has lived and learned
to cut me straight in half."
This is beautiful and really touched me - well done!
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daydreambeliever
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"is where the sorrow
of love gone wrong
has built its feathered nest."
Such a powerful build up to this ending stanza..I can so relate...the 'heart' does build a nest after experiencing
love's sorrow, a beautiful, flowing, emotive write..
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ardentMarch
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Good flow, even rhyme scheme, I liked it.
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strangerforeigner
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Great Write....i loved it...i know what you feel...i have some kind of connection to this poem just like all the rest of them, but for some odd reason.....its different....its hard to explain, but I LOVED IT!!!!
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babytibbz09
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very powerful and lovely poem......
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nilav
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Awesome!
Great write here! Nice flow and rhyme! Fantastic job!
Monique
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Monique
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pamela, i felt alongside this poem's beauty, angst and sadness. Oh my, so touching...I didn't want it to end; perhaps maybe a little of the sadness.
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LadyLavender
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Wow, respect, this is wonderful. I love the presentation too, and the image. The title echoes throughout the poetry and anchors it so well. Deft touches in every stanza make it such a convincing read which itself acts holistically as an invitation to peek through an open soulful door, into someone's very close and private space.
Thanks for sharing.
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Soloneili
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.........is where I place
the secret things
I would not dare to share.....
Opening up is very difficult most of the time. Brilliant piece of work
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Dorie
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Bravo
Once again you have delivered some wonderful work
from your mind and pen, How could anyone not relate in one way or another within this write,
As always you leave us all with something to ponder within your words.
Bravo to you Bravo to you.
Love and Light
Frozentearz
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Frozentearz
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Pam i see that the previous comments have said all that i could on this one.The lay out rhythm and rhyme all lend to the pleasure of the read. There is little left to say Except Excellent
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Legend
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A very well done piece of writing. Lovely content and layout that flows with controlled emotion, using language we all understand it is believable and very real to all of us who have been there.
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Frosty25
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Another awesome piece...
Wow, girl! Wow!
You have the greatest gift in expressing things...just so.
Excellent flow and meter, and a delicious rhyme to draw your reader avidly along right to the end.
Perfection in 43 lines (or so the line info tells me!).
Beautifully penned ~ destined to be a winner.
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paper paradox
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Pam I think this is one of your best for me. A wonderfully emotive poem, written in such an amazing style. The words are heartfelt yet beautiful. Loved this.
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Kiran
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Oh this is exceptional, woven with fluid emotions and tender voice.
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Ken
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completely AMAZING... 
THIS was... ummmm.... i can't even think of a great enough word to describe it. it tore at my heart thinking about losing someone that i can't imagine not having in my life. WOW... WOW...
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going nowhere
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beautiful!
This is a very beautifully constructed piece of art!
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Swangrnv
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This weeps with a vunerable voice.
It is so feminine, so open.
Just beautiful, I enjoyed every
detail in each line. Blue
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Blue
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very touching and tender, and expression so vulnerable and honest; the reader sees the imagery and each stanza seems to deepen slightly, a wonderful expressive and artful presentation here..PK
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PK
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Oh now that is just so bloody good, it flowed without effort and the emotion was there in every line.
I don't bookmark many poems, but this is one I will add to my list.
Supurb!!
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Colin
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No thanks required Pam, when quality like this is found it should be held up high for all the world to see .. what ever accolades you get for this poem are well deserved.
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