When listen, look at you reverently,
feel your sad beautiful grace
as a fearful, shy, simple bird,
meditating entranced.
Your voice, glance, sorrowful air
in whole ideal delicacy reveals
of dreams and tears to shine
in my moved repentance.
With sorrow, I adore, contemplate,
oh, piety of so sovereign example,
divine secret flower of beauty.
My sobs fill spaces,
when I hold tight you in narrow arms.
The lonely Madonna of sadness!
A contest entry
- EMOTION SECRETS by R S Adams Jr.
1100 points, ended February 19, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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almost classical
I like your succinct vocabulary and I like your spacing in this free verse. The lines, 4 then 3, then 2, then 1 give a form, which is appreciated.
The message is full of emotion and I can feel the poem. Well done.
Richard
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Excellent
Very creative poem full of sadness. Best of luck in the contest.
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