Mind provoking,
mysterious,
Warm, black.
sweet and fulfilling
Ever so fresh, tasty,
spontaneous, fun,
friendly and gorgeous
You complete me
Kenya, my Country.
A contest entry
- 71 Countries by unknownpleasure.
401 points, ended November 2, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Not the worst poem in the contest by any means, however, you seem to have chosen the most grotesque background/colour scheme imaginable in clear violation of the rules!
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Wow, well done. A very vivid picture you painted. I liked it.
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Talented
You really love your country and it shows with each word that is used in this poem. This is more than pride, this is dedication, this is devotion, this is committment, this is appreciation, this is love. We as Americans don't possess the love that we really should have for our country like other people have for theirs until something bad happens. I wish we all could show pride in something like you do. Keep writing and I'll keep reading.
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An excellent tribute to your country! I was pleasantly surprised by the ending, to find out what you were speaking about. Well done!
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quite nice and descriptive...full of pride
and ample with such contrasting words like
mysterious,
Warm, black.
sweet and fulfilling
Ever so fresh, tasty,
spontaneous, fun,
friendly and gorgeous
i wish you the best of days, thanks for the read -
i like it i like it alot, small and straight to the point i like how u find joy in the simple things and somehow put it into so few words ~The Don~
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First off, the title fit perfectly with your poem- I received such a beautiful picture of your pride and your heritage through your words. I like the use of colorful adjectives and brevety in the poem- this was very affective and meaningful. Brilliant job on this and may you never forget your "sweet and fulfilling...
friendly and gorgeous" homeland. Cheers
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thanks for that very beautiful comment.I entered this in a competition to describe Kenya in 12 words.
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cute! very random, enlightinging, bright and happy! great poem!
xoxo,
--gooshawn <3
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Very cool, I like the randomness of it...
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This was a great poem, the words so true, so are the emtions protraid in this piece as well, great job and keep up the good work.
This poem also reminded me of goals and customs that I have in my life, making me want to relook the ones that I have forgotten and make sure that I have everything in tow
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Outstanding
I thought this was a lovely tribute to your country and I liked the originality of the concept. The languge reflects your feelings for Kenya and I liked the last couple of lines - the poet at one and not sseperate with his surroundings. This is well-written and articulate.
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