I see your face when I close my eyes
A doomed romantic; an eternal child
As your voice leaves my speakers
The melody of your final days
I feel my frozen heart break
Your voice so withered and frail
If only I had been with you
If only I could have held you close
I could have loved you so
I see your face when I close my eyes
I understand your every weary word
I smile a bitter smile
Tears within my eyes
Even thirty-four years later
I love you and need you
I could have been your salvation
Your lover, your best friend
I could have loved you so
I see your face when I close my eyes
I see your rare smile; your laugh
I should have been with you
I should have held you close
Kept you warm during the cold
Your withdrawn cynicism
Your breath tasting of smoke
I could have been your lover
I could have loved you so
If only I could have held you close
Before your final breath was lost
I should have been with you
I should have been given a chance
To love you as you should have been loved
My dearest Nick Drake
May you sleep well
Author notes
Nick Drake is my favorite artist of all time and more then once the thought that I could have loved him has crossed my mind. This poem is very important to me, because... I wouldn't be who I am without his influence.
A contest entry
- project un-cliche by hks.
800 points, ended October 3, 2008, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thank You 4 Entering our Contest Porject Un-Cliche
hello there I am a judge for the contest mentioned above and well may I just say first off that I respect admire and appreciate you writing such a heart felt piece. If emotion alone was what we were looking for then you'd hands down would win gold BUT that is not all we are looking for ( the rest I cna not say because well im still unsure LOL ) any ways my point to this comment is damn! its sad when you lose someone important and someone you love and care about alot but you just got to remember the good times and hope they comfort you in your times of down. any ways I really felt your poem was like a song
good luck in the contest
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