[hold on baby,
you're stuck now]
♥
you glow in the dark
as i initiate the flame
your tongue rolls across my lips
as i scream your name
but oh, i'm such a fucking disaster
i'm murdered melodically [heroically] by the darkening lights
the tears that color cheeks so pale [so serene, so untouched]
deliberated feeble lines inside lips so contagious [outrageous]
& these fingers want to scribble words down your chest
[but i'm choking to death on my needs [my wants]
holding fates hands, running along the sidewalk
wishing your shadow was collaborated with mine
[I would paint your name in the sky
bite my lips & shut my eyes
wishing on forever, wishing i was clever
& hating to death that spaces are between you & i]
miles away,
you're too far away to save me [but just close enough]
hours away,
you're too deep inside to leave me [inside my skin]
forever away,
you're my escape to destiny
[& somehow, you became the perfect last line to all of my poems.]
Author notes
I don't care that "distance makes the heart grow fonder" I just want to see Chris.
A contest entry
- Romeo, oh Romeo! by Xx Luna xX.
300 points, ended February 21, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Everybody Scream Your Heart Out: PW! by Wilted Rose Bush.
450 points, ended February 23, 2008, 17 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I wish I could eat up the distance like a cookie monster.
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Hey Far. Me loves this! If you ever stopped writing I'd have to kick your hiney!
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Amazing..... seriously, seriously amazing.
I loved EVERY line of this, and I could put myself in it somehow, almost as if it happened to me.
These were my favorite parts of the poem;
"I would paint your name in the sky
bite my lips & shut my eyes"
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"[& somehow, you became the perfect last line to all of my poems.]"
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so emotional. so in love, so missing and so true. Ahh, i know exactly how you feel. i dont care bout shit, just love him. -eleno
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this is a very powerful and emotional write. you can have someone close too and they still feel really far away, well done and good luck
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Thank you for entering
Wow! This is powerful and it almost knocked me over! Great job!!
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I'm sitting in a bit of a stunned silence, && if i try to use adjectives like amazing, they seem almost empty, because they're not enough to describe this^^
So, I'll leave you with my awe && clappy men [=
♥
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Dayummm.
That's flippin amazing.
You're amazing.
I haven't looked at poems on this site in forever.
But boy, am I glad I did.
You kick ass.
<3BD9
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Wow that was really good, very beautiful and honest and deep and wow,, i love it!!! great job,
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this IS really good.
and i love how you put the words so melodically together.. everything just fits..
and i can feel everything this poem stands for.
I wish i could get words like these out my mind and onto MY paper.
great job darling.
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Wow. amazing
This is really good.
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