Forgotten
what it is
to cry,
The last
time I loved
I lied.
Sitting
in the park
at dusk.
Watching
memories pass.
Your name
etched
in sand,
Forgotten
the touch
of your hand.
To go
back home
would be
to
find you.
To be
absolute,
to
love you.
Author notes
Type 5: romantic love
A contest entry
- Sitting in the park at dusk by Tarkus Trilogy.
400 points, ended February 9, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Will you be the one to catch her? by over the rainbow--x.
525 points, ended February 20, 2008, 82 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Types Of Love(NEED TYPE 1 BEFORE JUDGING) by Blooming Poet.
300 points, ended March 31, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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That is definitly romantic love. I really like it. so sad the longing that goes with romantic love is there for sure. Loved it, especially here:
To go
back home
would be
to
find you.
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This was simple && yet, held it's message so well [=
Thanks for entering, good luck in my contest [=
♥
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Awesome poem
Hey J. You have done an excellent job here. Well written. I felt all emotional and dreamy thinking of myself
"Sitting
in the park
at dusk.
Watching
memories pass."
You deserve every point here (as always
))
PS: Congrats on the license!
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Hmm wow I was actually really impressed with how good with poem was! I was a little put off by how it was writin but you put this together vary nicely, and I love the fact that you made it a love poem.
Great write!
Good luck with the contest!
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Lovely, written in a different manner, I can feel the emotion, truly maganda, I like it
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A darling love poem, really tenderly written and truly beautiful. Makes me sad and glad.
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