The life that I knew
With my friends and family
I can feel seeping away
I know now it is not a
Matter of how but when and
Though I can feel it happening
There isn't a damn thing
That I can do about it
I see you looking at me
Staring at what used to
Be the thing I called self
The fact that your gaze
Now penetrates all the way
Through me makes my eyes tear
And my heart ache all the more
How much pain can the heart
Endure in its struggle to
Right itself from within
Before the very thing that
It is trying to fix
No longer yields and the
Heart breaks against that
Irresistible thing that is pain
What do you do when
At the bottom of your gut
Lies strewn the pieces that
You once knew as love, life
And happiness and the only
Thing left standing over them
Is your fear and pain
Yet even my fear is cracking up
No longer able to cope with
The pieces piling higher still
What life is this that I
Have and that I now lead
With broken pieces and empty
Spaces within that will not
Heal or repair themselves
With no hope left to draw on
And the ticking noises getting
Louder I stumble yet again
I find myself bent over
Farther and farther as a
Slave to this thing that
I cannot run from and I fear
The weight will not lift until
It has me bent over to the point
Where it holds me in the ground
And anchors me for eternity
Author notes
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Such emotion,
very powerful!
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wonderfully written lots of emotion. Thanks so much for sharing and Ih ope to read moef rom you maybe soon.
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Ouch.
there's so much pain and despair in your verse, I ached in time with the words. These lines just jumped out at me, wonderful image: "the only
Thing left standing over them
Is your fear and pain"
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Thank you very much!
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"How much pain can the heart
Endure in its struggle to
Right itself from within
Before the very thing that
It is trying to fix
No longer yields and the
Heart breaks against that
Irresistible thing that is pain"
the best part of this piece.
on the whole...i loved it. it seems so sad, so lost...so hopeless. very powerful emotionally.
the darkness cant last forever, you know. I am living proof of that. so, take heart in that, if you can. (I know that it's not easy to see or to hear things like that, but hopefully one day...)
anyway, wonderful write.
(as usual
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Cheers,
S -
Excellent Message!
I can completely and utterly relate to this pinned down feeling. It happens every so often to all of us in some shape or another. The last for me, was back in November when our Mother made a State of the Family address to her kids, decreeing that we had all moved so apart from one another. that there was jealousy and regretfullness that she could feel through each one of us and so on... I live in Ca. The rest of my immediate family in other states. It's hard to be there all the time, so i took it at first as ..."Something needs to be done about this NOW!", then realized that I am not in everyone's business, nor should I be. We are all adults. We have long since all moved away. And that it was only our Mother that saw these things on a one on one basis. So, there is nothing I can do about that. Only my Mother can. And that lifted that weight. I realized, in the end, These were my mothers concerns not at us as a whole, but as she had to deal with us on that one on one. If there was any gossip or jealousy or misgivings, I was not aware of any, nor was I made aware of any, so I lifted that weight myself, rather than addressing her speech to us. Anyway... so yeah, ...I can in a round a bout way definitely.... relate! Great thoughts! Very Provocatived!
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