The room is lit in flames of scent,
Spices and fruits, exotic and arousing
In light of the night’s company.
The movie grows dull in comparison
To the curves which play upon your body,
Calling out to my hands, begging.
The blue-white glare of the screen
Vanishes, replaced by blissful shadows,
Dancing across the walls.
The heat grows stifling,
And the first layer comes slowly off,
Every inch another shuddering breath.
Hands begin to roam,
Ever so slowly exploring the shadows
Which play upon the lines of your body.
Another set of clothes are thrown,
Hiding in the shadowed corners of the room,
Lost from all thought.
Breathing becomes hard,
Gasps and moans break the silence,
And the shadows gather around us.
To the shuddering sighs of your breathing,
I bring myself into your warmth,
Twin moans crying out as one.
The night grows long,
Our passion strong,
And still, the shadows watch.
Below me, your body writhes,
A tantalizing dance,
With shadows playing across your skin.
Your nails dig crescents into my back,
Every thrust bringing a torrent of pain,
Coalescing with the pleasure.
As the hours slide by,
The climax enters the room,
Drawn by the hints of our pleasure.
Stalking along the shadowy room,
It reaches us as one,
Bringing the song to a chorus of desire.
Amongst the weakening sighs,
The ecstasy laden eyes,
Dawn had found it’s home.
A contest entry
- HAPPY VALENTINE'S DAY! by Jeremy0826.
1600 points, ended January 31, 2008, 11 entries
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525 points, ended June 1, 2008, 25 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Comments
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Nicely and softly written here Nick, I like it. But it has not a thing to do with rain or even mentions it, don't know how that will go over with the host. best of luck... Scott :0
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totally awesome
Very sensual and passionate, I enjoyed your poem and I could feel every senual passion, wow i am thinking cold shower time lol, good luck in the contest -
FanTastic!!!!!!
WOW...this is actually a write I can really relate to, it reminds me deeply of a personal experience I had with a special someone before. Why do couples try to watch movies together? I know, because it ends up being like this!!! Very seductive, your words and images seduced me to the very end. Great job and Godd luck
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This write is absolutely stunning...wow..breathtaking. Lovely flow. No dull moments
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a very special piece of timeless erotica... This is amazing, I love the rhyme and the flow, and all the best in the contest.
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The metric rhythm of this piece adds to the sensuality of this piece -- shadows and silhouettes are something I adore in various forms of art, that really painted a picture in my head. Thanks for sharing.
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The grammar was great, the flow was great, the piece was sensual and well thought out, but the repetition of shadows and breathing did not work for me. You should find synonyms to these words and then this piece will be great.
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The sensuality that permeated from this was amazing
Your word usage set the tone and I was totally taken in with the correct use of punctuation, spelling and grammar
enjoyed this one - thank you
This one belongs in the prelim list
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great flow and meter to this piece!
the imagery danced in my head as i read this one!
thanks for entering my contest, and good luck!
mike, aka jonathan wikkins -
great flow and meter to this piece!
the imagery danced in my head as i read this one! -
This is very nice. My favorite stanza,
"The night grows long,
Our passion strong,
And still, the shadows watch."
Always curious how the shadows watch us love. Added depth and mystery to the poem. Good luck. -
Lovely work here and I love the flow
of this one! Thanks a lot for taking
the time to write for this contest.
I wish you the best of luck with it
and keep up the wonderful work here!
I appreciate your entry!
Jeremy0826 -
This poem was really good. I liked how you didn't give it all away right away and teased with every word. Very well written. Also, for a free verse poem, it had a lovely flow to it which added to the erotic nature of it all. Good luck in the contest
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