Freedom rings in her mind
as it grasps her throat with force.
Her heart once consumed with love
now obsessed with the divorce.
She promised him forever
now wishes time would fly
not liking who they have become
as they prepare to say good bye.
Friends are what they promised
but that concept didn't last.
Any kindness or consideration
will lie buried in the past.
Time will surely heal the scars
in its deliberate grudging way
as payment for a promise
of happiness one day.
A contest entry
- TEN THOUSAND POINTS OF RHYME (Now 20,000+) Part 9a Feelings by cricketjeff.
1500 points, ended January 29, 2008, 40 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Very well written
Wow, a very well written and thought provoking Poem
. Keep up the great work.
Cheers
Terry
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This has been on my mind as of late to be honest. I am not married, I have not been since 1995 but still this intrigues me. To find someone to love, get married and then get divorced. There seems to be so much communication lost and fear seems to be the culprit. Fear of telling your true feelings, fear of rejection and fear of reprisal. Or maybe it is just me. I guess you just need to find someone who you are compatible with. I tis never easy for some.
This is a nicely written piece. The subject is not nice but how you penned it is.
Kyle
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Well written piece on an important subject. Lots of feeling clearly.
All the best and we both hope you enter round 10.
Thanks for the entry and congratulations on the HM
Jeff and Sue
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Rosemarie, this is a great poem you wrote. I can feel the sadness with a touch of hope in the end as I was reading this. Well done and congratulations on the honorable mention!
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WOW! This just blasts you full in the face. Way to go, my friend. There is raw emotion within these lines that is just begging to be set free. I can feel it! WOW! is all I can say! Amazingly written. Keep the ink flowing and good luck. Love and hugs...
~Donna~
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Blimey, this is just brilliant. The last two lines in particular are amazing, kinda withering, love the way you've written this, my friend. Great work indeed,
Alex.
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What can I say except brilliant!!
I felt the emotion & sadness in every line. There's a touch of hope lingering but their lives will never be the same.
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Ohhh divorce and the pain it causes one. Although my divorce from my first husband was a joy, he abused me for so many years. But my huband Jason whom I am blessed with now I could not imagine life without him in it. Excelllent write
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This is a brilliant piece of poetry, describing in such an emotive way the pain of two people seperating. It is heartfelt and poignant. Well done with this.
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