I started in America and crept into the east,
I'm black in nature, black in sight and I'm a viscious beast.
I'm a christian soldier, I'm a muslim man,
I'm from Spain and Germany, China and Japan.
I've cloned myself in England too, spawned from old Baghdad,
And now I'm making millions and turning good men bad.
And if you want to know my name then hi, I'm Mr. War,
And I'm no stranger to this town, no I've been here before.
I'm stronger than the average man, a huge Greek minotaur,
I use my strength against the weak, I can, I'm Mr. War.
I follow my own shadow and I flex to my reflection,
I pride to watch my muscles when they're pumped up to perfection.
I only think about my growth and where I will invade,
I crush the churches and the altars where the people prayed.
I single out the helpless and I make them even smaller,
Knocked the two twin towers down to show that I am taller.
I'm the steroid that you need to make you get a score,
I'm the brawn and I'm the brain, I am Mr. War.
I've taken forms of many things, but mostly forms of men,
I kill what you call happiness with rifles, bombs and stens.
My name is Hitler, Mussolini, Pilot, Herod too,
My name's Bin Laden and Hussein, my name is even YOU.
Author notes
For all you Americans....the line "I started in America" refers to bush deciding to go to war with Iraq, not intended to be offensive, just factual. The rest of the poem speaks for itself...... are YOU like Mr. war?
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Comments
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bravo. i love it
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I like this piece almost as much as your other, but for the sake of fairness, I'm going to try to make sure each poet only gets one award (though I'm going entirely by style to know who wrote what). I will be adding anything I deem good enough to the finalists, however, and if the quality of the poetry I've been reading doesn't improve, I may be forced to have you win everything!
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ooh...i loved this. This is very anti-war but from a point of view as if you are advertising war. It is very hitting work. I applaud you.
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Great, you place pressure on the fact that the wars always start with you.
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Two thumbs up!
Wow this is really good i love how it flows with each line.....this is really good! keep up the good...great job.
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This is a wonderful poem... not so wonderful are the realities of what you are speaking of... I really like the poetic devices you have used here... this poem is beautifully written - I wish you the best in the contest
Keep writing
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Wow. A raw "look in the mirror" challenge. Love it. I do take issue with the first line though.Now, I think that war existed long before America was born, don't you? Not meant to be offensive, just factThat being said, this is a finely crafted piece. I think my favorite lines would be
"I only think about my growth and where I will invade,
I crush the churches and the altars where the people prayed."
Beautiful contrast between the spiritual battles and the physical battles.
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Mr War is a whore, a boring whore is he/she
Now get the word out, brother!
Grrrrrreat stuff, send a copy to Mr George W Bush and another to the leadership in Parliament and to the Prime Minister or Sinister, whoever that be, Mr Brown Gordon eh?
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I liked this a lot ...
Definately made me think ...
I love the way you expressed everything ...
Word choice is beautiful.
Rhyme is grand.
You're very talented
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Do you not believe there are freedoms and ideals worth fighting for?? War is unfortunate...it brings pain, death and destruction as you have so skillfully written. However, it is sometimes necessary....A nicely done piece.
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Excellent!
You have written a superb poem here about the attrocity and needlessness of war, though some American's may take the first line personally, even though it is not personal. Enjoyed reading this as I like to read poems that make you stop and think. Great job. Julie.
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