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A poem on time or something

I'd freeze time
to sing you songs
and take you back
to those moments

I'd stop the sun
to sit and wait
outside your house
just for you

I'd rewind life
to all those years
to fix mistakes
I had made

I'd break the clock
that tells that time
is racing on
while I'm stuck here

I'd wait here always
ever in the past
holding on to you,
I'd never let you go

I'll watch the clock
unwind from inside
to tell me now
my time's run out.

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  • stephilou
    February 4, 2008

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    Nicely done! I often wish I could rewind time as well...not only to fix what went wrong, but also to remain in the moments that I never really appreciated until they were gone.


  • The Squeeze
    January 27, 2008

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    Good Evening

    "A Poem on time or something?" how peculiar of a word choice describing something so sentimental on this. What I would like to know is who you are addressing your poem to, a former love? A secret crush? A good friend? Or an adult?

    Your reminiscent nature of the past is quick and light, like the sun awakening in the morning. I find it all, beautiful, except your conclusion, which I found to be abrupt and...inconclusive, but perhaps this was your wish.

    Bravo

    A.S.